Writing Revision Practice

What is the primary purpose of the revision process in writing?

• To check for spelling errors only

• To improve the overall quality of the writing

• To make the writing longer

• To make the writing insignificant

Christina has made an error in sentence 2. Select the response that corrects this error.

Delaney, a friend I've known since kindergarten, moved with her parents to ​ .​

• Oak, Park, a suburb of Chicago
• oak Park, a suburb of Chicago

• oak park, a Suburb of Chicago

• oak park, a suburb of chicago

What change should be made in sentence 3?

• Change careers to career's

• Insert a comma after hours

• Change meant to mint

• Change had to has

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 8?

• Change course to coarse

• Change the comma after honest to a period

• Change drastically to drastic

• No change is needed

What change should be made in sentence 6?

• Change the comma after shock to a semicolon

• Change allow to allowed

• Delete but

• Change single to singel

Ivy needs to add a sentence to improve the introductory paragraph of her paper. Which sentence can BEST be added after sentence 1?

• When I heard about the class, I knew the instructor would let me copy her painting exactly.

• I'm talking about the kind where an instructor tells you how to make a painting step by step.

• My friend Ella said we should spend time together over break, and I told her we should paint.

• When I first tried to paint sunflowers, I was grateful to see I had a bit of natural talent for art.

Ivy needs a better transition between the second paragraph (sentences 3-8) and the third paragraph (sentences 9-11). Which phrase can she add to the beginning of sentence 9 to help with this transition?

• In response

• For this reason

• As the class began

• In the same way

What is the MOST effective way to combine sentences 14 and 15?

• The jagged white streak that I tried to cover with blue paint to my horror remained visible beneath the blue.

• I tried to cover the jagged white streak with blue paint, to my horror it remained visible beneath the blue.

• Trying to cover the jagged white streak with blue paint, it remained visible to my horror beneath the blue.

• I tried to cover the jagged white streak with blue paint, but to my horror it remained visible beneath the blue.

Ivy has included a sentence that does not belong in the sixth paragraph (sentences 23-28). Which sentence should she remove from this paragraph?

• Sentence 23

• Sentence 24

• Sentence 25

• Sentence 26

Ivy needs a better closing sentence for the last paragraph (sentences 33-36). Which sentence should replace sentence 36?

• Every time I see it, I think of all the difficulty I experienced while painting it.

• To this day, I love to wear the T-shirt I had on that day in the painting class.

• As imperfect as it is, that painting makes me feel happy now.

• From there people see it as they pass by on the sidewalk.