Unit 2 Editing/Revising Review

Which sentence should be removed from paragraph 1 because it does not support the main idea?

• Sentence 2

• Sentence 3

• Sentence 4

• Sentence 5

Answer explanation

Sentence 5 (“I keep it on a shelf above my bed…”) doesn’t support the main idea about collecting caps — it’s just a small detail that doesn’t add much.

What is the most effective transition to replace "Over the years" at the beginning of sentence 6?

• In conclusion

• Without a doubt

• As time passed

• In the meantime

Answer explanation

This transition shows that time has gone by and the collection has grown, which makes the paragraph flow better.

What change should be made in sentence 10?

• Change "aren't" to "isn't"

• Replace the comma with a semicolon

• Change "they" to "them"

• Add "that" after "story"

Answer explanation

The two parts of sentence 10 are complete sentences. A semicolon is the correct punctuation to join them without creating a run-on.

What change needs to be made in sentence 8?

• Add a comma after "Chicago"

• Change "brought" to "bring"

• Change "one" to "ones"

• No change is needed

Answer explanation

A comma is needed after “Chicago” to separate the introductory phrase from the rest of the sentence.

What is the best way to combine sentences 8 and 9?

• My cousin brought me one from a baseball game in Chicago, and my aunt sent me a bright red cap.

• My cousin brought me one from a baseball game in Chicago, and my aunt sent me a bright red cap from her trip to New York.

• My cousin brought me one from a baseball game, and my aunt sent a cap.

• My cousin and aunt both bought caps from trips.

Answer explanation

This version keeps all the details and combines the sentences smoothly.

What change should be made in sentence 2?

• Change "different" to "difference"

• Remove the dash and replace it with a comma

• Change "collect" to "collecting"

• Change "baseball caps" to "baseball cap"

Answer explanation

A comma fits the sentence better and keeps the tone clear and simple.

What revision would make paragraph 3 more effective?

• Combine sentences 12 and 13 into: “The salty wind was blowing strong that day, and my dad and I found a small stand where an older man was selling handmade caps.”

• Delete sentence 11

• Move sentence 14 before sentence 12

• Replace “Every time” in sentence 15 with “Although”

Answer explanation

Combining them makes the story flow better and avoids short, choppy sentences.

What change should be made to sentence 17?

• Change “it’s” to “its”

• Change “pile” to “piles”

• Change “They” to “Them”

• No change is needed

Answer explanation

“Caps” is plural, so “pile” should be plural too: “piles.”

Which sentence would be the best conclusion for this passage?

• Everyone should collect baseball caps.

• My caps are more than fabric — they’re memories stitched into every thread.

• My collection is bigger than anyone else’s.

• Baseball caps are better than trading cards.

Answer explanation

This sentence wraps up the whole passage by restating the main idea in a strong, meaningful way.

What is the best way to combine sentences 18 and 19?

• But to me, each cap is a memory, and each one reminds me of a person, a place, or a special moment in my life.

• But to me, each cap is a memory, each one reminding me of a person, a place, or a special moment.

• But to me, each cap is a memory that reminds me of a person, a place, or a special moment in my life.

• But to me, each cap is a memory and reminds me of people, places, and moments.

Answer explanation

This version combines the ideas clearly and smoothly without repeating words.