4.6 Revise and Edit

Harrison wants to improve the coherence of his introduction by adding this phrase. 'All joking aside,' Where is the BEST place to add this phrase?

• At the beginning of sentence 2

• At the beginning of sentence 3

• At the beginning of sentence 4

• At the beginning of sentence 5

Harrison forgot to include this important sentence in the text. 'As their name implies, they sound like pokey little pigs—grunting, sniffing, and squealing—beneath bushes and shrubs.' Where is the BEST place to add this sentence?

• After sentence 6

• After sentence 7

• After sentence 8

• After sentence 9

Harrison would like to add another detail to his text. Which of the following should be inserted after sentence 13?

• Lots of invertebrates, such as earthworms and insects, estivate as well.

• Other mammals that estivate include desert ground squirrels and cactus mice.

• During periods of hibernation or estivation, a hedgehog’s heart rate drops from 190 beats per minute to 20 beats per minute.

• Both hibernation and estivation allow all types of animals to survive for long periods of time with minimal food or water.

Harrison’s text ends abruptly. Which sentence can be added to the end of this paper to close it more effectively?

• That’s why hedgehogs are better than pigs, hands down.

• Petting a hedgehog is like stroking a bristly hairbrush.

• Hedgehogs are the best, and that’s no joke.

• Hedgehogs don’t typically bother people with animal allergies.