Revise STAAR

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

• She can’t wait to play Zoo Madness, so she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.

• She can’t wait to play Zoo Madness because she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.

• She can’t wait to play Zoo Madness, she skips through the introduction and gets right to the action.

• She can’t wait to play Zoo Madness, and she skips through the introduction, and she gets right to the action.

Mitchell would like to add the following sentence to the second paragraph (sentences 6–12). Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• At the beginning of the paragraph

• After sentence 6

• After sentence 8

• After sentence 9

Mitchell wants to help readers move from the fourth paragraph (sentences 16–23) to the fifth paragraph (sentences 24–26). Which sentence or sentences should Mitchell insert at the beginning of the fifth paragraph, just before sentence 24?

• It’s a rhinoceros! Oh, no!

• Uh-oh! Another animal is just around the corner.

• Then Lauren hears a stomp and a huff

• The tiger is trapped and won’t be going anywhere.

This room is colder then the one we were working in last week. How should sentence 1 be changed?

• Change is to is being

• Change then to than

• Change colder to cold

• Make no change to this sentence.

How many passages will you revise?

• 0

• 1

• 2

• 3

Which of the following is the best revision for the following sentence? The boy had a birthday coming up and wanted cake.

• The young boy had his 6th birthday coming up on Saturday, and was hoping for a Spiderman Cake!

• The boy had a birthday and ate cake.

• The cake was eaten by the boy who was having a birthday.

Clair wants to strengthen the focus of her story. Which of the following is the BEST replacement for sentence 10?

• Being at camp had been a wonderful experience for Jared and the other kids.

• Jared was sometimes a little afraid to do things he had never done before.

• Today was Jared's last chance to overcome his fear and give rappelling a try.

• Even though the others had been rappelling down the side of the cliff, Jared didn't want to.

What is the BEST revision to make in this sentence?

• I was also nervous, I was worrying about poisonous snakes.

• I was nervous, too also, but I was worrying about poisonous snakes.

• I was nervous, too, but I was worrying about poisonous snakes.

• I was nervous and was also worrying about poisonous snakes, too.

How should sentence 3 be changed?

• Change new to newly

• Change run to runs

• Change faster to fast

• Make no change to the sentence.

Choose the best written sentence.

(a)  

• My mother forgot to lock the door to the backyard; consequently, the dog escaped from the yard.

• My mother forgot to lock the door to the backyard; however, the dog escaped from the yard.

• My mother forgot to lock the door to the backyard; furthermore, the dog escaped from the yard.