STAAR English Revision

Sentence 2 needs to be revised. In the box provided, rewrite sentence 2 in a clear and effective way.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

Which sentences can replace sentences 4 and 5 to create a more effective controlling idea for this paper?

• However, one swimmer, Sarah Thomas, has managed to go above and beyond all the rest. She set a new record by swimming the English Channel four times without stopping.

• But Sarah Thomas is a swimmer who yearned to do more. She has faced some challenging circumstances in her life and felt confident she was ready to tackle the English Channel.

• As a result, Sarah Thomas was able to accomplish something no swimmer had ever accomplished. She swam across the English Channel and set an impressive record.

• Yet Sarah Thomas was able to complete a swim that was an incredible feat. She made it across the English Channel with the help of a small team and was proud of her accomplishment.

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

Heike wants to add this sentence to the third paragraph of her paper (sentences 10–14). Where is the best place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 10

• After sentence 11

• After sentence 12

• After sentence 13

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CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

Sentence 18 contains an indefinite reference that affects the clarity of the sentence. What is the best way to revise sentence 18?

• Change She to They

• Change but to and

• Change they to crew members

• Change her to another teammate

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CCSS.L.1.1D

CCSS.L.3.1A

What is the MOST effective revision to make in sentence 23?

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, pulling out brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and paper scraps that I hastily glued together.

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, pulling out brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and there were paper scraps that I hastily and quickly glued together.

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, hastily and quickly gluing together what I pulled out, which was brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and paper scraps.

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, pulling out and removing brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and paper scraps for hastily gluing together.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

Which sentence in the fifth paragraph (sentences 20–24) contains unnecessary information and should be removed?

• Sentence 20

• Sentence 21

• Sentence 22

• Sentence 23

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CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

What change needs to be made in sentence 2?

• Change It to They

• Delete the comma after space

• Change had to has

• Change approximatly to approximately

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

What change needs to be made in sentence 4?

• Delete the comma after towers

• Change call to called

• Change is to are

• Change practical to practacal

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

What change needs to be made in sentence 10?

• Change documentary to documentery

• Insert a comma after Towers

• Change that to who

• Change Austin’s to Austins’

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CCSS.L.1.1B

CCSS.L.2.2C

CCSS.L.3.2D

What change should be made in sentence 12?

• Change But to While

• Change is to was

• Change Zilker Park holiday tree to Zilker Park Holiday Tree

• Change its to it’s

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CCSS.L.2.2C