Star Revising and Editing

What change, if any, should be made in the following sentence:
They don't usually let humans get very close to them and they travel in places too dense for wildlife photographers to go.  

• Insert a comma after them

• Delete and

• Change places too dense to places to dense

• No change should be made.

What change needs to be made in the following sentence:
The images that the elephant cameras had captured were impressive, no human cinematographer could have captured such realistic footage.  

• Change were to was

• Change impressive to impresive

• Change the comma to a semicolon

• Change realistic to realism

What change should be made to the following sentence:

"But now," he added, "It seems the most natural thing in the world."

• Change the comma after added to a period

• Change It to it

• Change world to World

• No change should be made in sentence 25.

A friend is someone I can tell persinal stuff to when I'm sad.

• change to to too

• change someone to some one

• change persinal to personel

• change persinal to personal

The girl next to me in my class always cheat.

• change girl to girl's

• change cheat to cheats

• change me to I

• change my to mine

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 11 and 12?

• Running a new country is expensive, Texas became deep in debt.

• Because running a new country is expensive, Texas became deep in debt.

• Texas became deep in debt, also, running a new country is expensive.

• Deep in debt, Texas, a new country, became deep in debt.

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What is the BEST way to combine sentences 14 and 15?

• 1. The United States Congress, in 1845, voted to annex Texas to be the twenty-eighth state

     admitted to the United States of America.

• 1. In 1845, the United States Congress voted to annex Texas which became the twenty- eighth state admitted to the United States of America.

• 1. Texas became the 28th state admitted to the United States of America in 1845 by the United States Congress.

• 1. The 28th state to be admitted to the United States was Texas in 1845 by the United States Congress.

What change, if any, should be made to sentence 13?

• 1. change help to helping

• 1. remove the comma after States

• 1. change financially to financialy

• no change needed

What change, if any, should be made to sentence 16?

• change The United States of America to the United States of America

• change America the Beautiful to America the beautiful
  

• change national anthem to National Anthem
  

• No change needed

What change, if any, should be made to sentence 16?

• While the importance of several other songs are recognized by The United State of America including “America the Beautiful, Hail, Columbia, My Country, Tis of Thee, and God Bless America, The Star Spangled Banner” is recognized as our national anthem.

• While the importance of several other songs are recognized by The United State of America including “America the Beautiful” “Hail, Columbia” “My Country, Tis of Thee” and “God Bless America” “The Star Spangled Banner” is recognized as our national anthem.

• While the importance of several other songs are recognized by The United State of America including “America the Beautiful,” “Hail, Columbia,” “My Country, Tis of Thee,” and “God Bless America,” “The Star Spangled Banner” is recognized as our National Anthem.

• No change needed