Revising

The write has a lead or hook in her introduction, but she has failed to include a specific thesis statement.  Re-read the prompt and then choose the best thesis. 

• A  It’s important to never give up because you may achieve your goals and build your character. 
• B  You shouldn’t give up on important things in life just because they are hard.
• C  People give up too easily when life gets tough.
• D  When you face challenges, you can choose to quit or to keep going.

What needs to be underlined in sentence 4?

• A  Disney
• B  movie
• C  Finding Nemo
• D  Marlin

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CCSS.L.5.2D

What needs to be underlined in sentence 10?

• A  Rolan Lazenby’s
•   B. biography
•   C  titled
• D  Michael Jordan:  The Life

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CCSS.RI.3.5

CCSS.RL.4.1

CCSS.RL.5.1

CCSS.RL.9-10.9

  How can sentence 11 be changed correctly and improved so the sentence structure is changed and it is no longer a simple sentence? 

• A  While he was in high school, Jordan tried out for the basketball team but didn’t
    make the cut. 
• B  Jordan tried out for the basketball team but didn’t make the cut in the end.
• C  Jordan tried out for the high school basketball team but didn’t make the cut. 
• D  Tried out for the basketball team but didn’t make the cut.

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CCSS.L.1.1J

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.7.1B

  Sentences 13-15 all start with “He.”  How can sentence 14 be changed correctly to create sentence variety? 

• A  A challenging workout routine and he practiced hours a day to become
    better. 
• B  Challenging workout routine and practicing hours a day to become
    better. 
• C  To become better, he created a challenging workout routine and practiced hours a
    day. 
• D  Creating a challenging workout routine and practiced hours a day to become
    better.

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CCSS.L.1.1J

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.7.1B

The writer has structured the two body paragraphs of her essay by using—

• A  cause-effect
• B  specific examples
• C  comparison-contrast
• D  how-to steps