W4'16 Now

Claire wants to strengthen the focus of her story. Which of the following is the

BEST replacement for sentence 10?

• Being at camp had been a wonderful experience for Jared and the other kids.

• Jared was sometimes a little afraid to do things he had never done before.

• Today was Jared’s last chance to overcome his fear and give rappelling a try.

• Even though the others had been rappelling down the side of the cliff, Jared

  didn’t want to.

The meaning of sentence 12 is unclear. What change can Claire make to improve

the clarity of this sentence?

• Change He to Another counselor

• Change cliff to spot

• Change him to them

• Change the rope to it

Which of these sentences can BEST follow and support sentence 15?

• She would help keep the rope tight and make sure Jared was safe coming

  down.

• Andrea had been such a good friend, and looking down at her right now made

  Jared think of all the fun they had had.

• Jared was feeling great and stepped back from the cliff to look around at all

  the beautiful scenery.

• Andrea was right there, connected to the rope that Jared was connected to at

  the bottom of the cliff.

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 24 and 25?

• Since he made his way steadily down with a grin, it began to spread over his

  face.

• He made his way steadily down because a grin began to spread over his face.

• As he made his way steadily down, a grin began to spread over his face.

• He made his way steadily down a grin began to spread over his face.

Claire forgot to include an important detail in the last paragraph

(sentences 16–29).

Reread the paragraph carefully. Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 19

• After sentence 20

• After sentence 21

• After sentence 26

Claire’s paper ends abruptly and leaves the reader wondering what happens next.

Which sentence should Claire add to the end of her paper?

• He had made it down and had actually rappelled.

• “Where’s my snack?” he asked the counselors.

• He didn’t have a doubt about what he wanted to say.

• “Can I do it again?” he shouted with excitement.