Editing for Clarity and Consistency

Which revision improves clarity in the sentence: "The doctor spoke with her nurse after she finished her shift"?

• The doctor talked to her nurse after she was done.

• The doctor spoke with the nurse after she finished her shift.

• After finishing her shift, the doctor spoke with her nurse.

• The doctor spoke with her nurse after the nurse finished her shift.

Identify the issue: "The students were studying for the test, but then the teacher hands out homework."

• A) Pronoun inconsistency

• B) Tense shift

• C) Ambiguity

• D) Wordiness

Revise the wordiness: "In order to successfully complete the project, you must have access to the necessary materials."

• A) To complete the project, you need the materials.

• B) You need the materials to complete the project successfully.

• C) You should have materials to complete the project successfully.

• D) For completion, materials are necessary.

Which choice fixes the vague pronoun reference? "Jessica told Maria that she had forgotten her book."

• A) Jessica forgot her book and told Maria.

• B) Jessica informed Maria about her forgotten book.

• C) Jessica told Maria, "I forgot my book."

• D) Jessica told Maria that Maria had forgotten the book.

Revise: "The athlete trained with intensity every day in order to be able to improve her endurance."

• A) The athlete trained every day so she could increase her endurance.

• B) The athlete trained intensely every day to improve her endurance.

• C) The athlete trained every day with great intensity for endurance.

• D) The athlete worked hard daily to increase endurance.

Which revision clarifies the sentence? "While cooking, the pot began to boil over."

• While the pot was cooking, it began to boil over.

• The pot boiled over while cooking.

• The pot began to boil over as the chef was cooking.

• While the chef was cooking, the pot began to boil over.

Identify the issue: "After winning the game, her coach congratulated the team."

• A) Pronoun clarity

• B) Passive voice

• C) Ambiguity

• D) Tense shift

Which is the best way to maintain consistency in pronoun use? "If one wants to succeed, you need to work hard."

• A) If one wants to succeed, they need to work hard.

• B) If you want to succeed, you need to work hard.

• C) If one wants to succeed, you must work hard.

• D) If one wants to succeed, one must work hard.

How can we clarify this sentence? "The representative helped the client after they arrived."

• A) The representative helped after the client arrived.

• B) The representative helped the client when they arrived.

• C) The representative helped after the client showed up.

• D) The representative helped after the client’s arrival.

Which choice avoids active/passive inconsistency? "The chef made the meal, and the dessert was done by the assistant."

• A) The chef made the meal, then did the dessert.

• B) The chef made the meal, the assistant did dessert.

• C) The chef made the meal, while the assistant did dessert.

• D) The chef made the meal; the assistant handled dessert.