Editing and Revising

Oktober brake is coming up in a few weaks.

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Answer explanation

October, break, and weeks were spelled incorrectly.

october is mrs. burns favorite month because she likes halloween.

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Answer explanation

October, Mrs. Burns, and Halloween should be start with an uppercase letter. They are holidays and a person's name.

October is a soothing month for some people because they do not like scary things.

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Answer explanation

Soothing is not the correct word choice for the explanation at the end of the sentence. Soothing means calming. It is the opposite of what people who don't like scary things would feel.

On my October break I will sleep in be lazy and go to bed late

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Answer explanation

There are commas missing after October, sleep in, be lazy, and a period missing at the end of the sentence. Commas can separate items in a list and a period ends a thought.

Before the end of September, I need to turn in any missing work. I am going camping on October break. If I turn in missing work, it will raise my grade.

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Answer explanation

"I am going camping on October break" does not relate to school assignments and should be removed.

I have a list of things I want to get done on my break. Then, I will go back to school.

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What are the things you will get done? There needs to be more detail about what you will do.

A week October break lasts. Relaxing is it to have a break after each quarter of the school year.

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Answer explanation

"A week" should be at the end of the first sentence not the beginning.
The beginning of the second sentence should be, "It is relaxing to have...". Otherwise, we sound like Yoda when we're writing this.

Taking a break is good. October break is fun.

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Answer explanation

"Good" and "fun" are not strong words. We could use better words to show how much you like October break and taking breaks.