Mini-Battle 3: Body Paragraphs*

What is the BEST way to rewrite sentence 1?

(1) Save money. (2) I got a speeding ticket, and I paid a massive fine. (3) I am talking to my mom on the phone and not paying attention when the speed limit sign changed. (4) I talk to my mom almost every day. (5) Following rules saves people money becaus speeding tickets cost a fortune.

• Rules save money.

• They save money.

• When people follow rules, they save money.

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CCSS.L.7.3A

CCSS.W.7.2D

Which transition works BEST at the beginning of sentence 2?

(1) Save money. (2) I got a speeding ticket, and I paid a massive fine. (3) I am talking to my mom on the phone and not paying attention when the speed limit sign changed. (4) I talk to my mom almost every day. (5) Following rules saves people money becaus speeding tickets cost a fortune.

• For example,

• All in all,

• Therefore,

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CCSS.W.7.2C

CCSS.W.7.3C

How can the author revise to use stronger verbs in Sentence 2?

(1) Save money. (2) I got a speeding ticket, and I paid a massive fine. (3) I am talking to my mom on the phone and not paying attention when the speed limit sign changed. (4) I talk to my mom almost every day. (5) Following rules saves people money becaus speeding tickets cost a fortune.

• change got to gets

• change got to received

• change paid to got

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CCSS.W.7.2D

CCSS.W.7.3D

Where can the author BEST add the following prepositional phrase in Sentence 2?

for going 74 in a 55

(1) Save money. (2) I got a speeding ticket, and I paid a massive fine. (3) I am talking to my mom on the phone and not paying attention when the speed limit sign changed. (4) I talk to my mom almost every day. (5) Following rules saves people money becaus speeding tickets cost a fortune.

• after paid

• after ticket

• after speeding

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CCSS.L.7.1A

Which transition works BEST at the beginning of sentence 3?

(1) Save money. (2) I got a speeding ticket, and I paid a massive fine. (3) I am talking to my mom on the phone and not paying attention when the speed limit sign changed. (4) I talk to my mom almost every day. (5) Following rules saves people money becaus speeding tickets cost a fortune.

• For example,

• Moreover,

• This proves that

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CCSS.W.7.2C

CCSS.W.7.3C

Which transition works BEST at the beginning of sentence 5?

(1) Save money. (2) I got a speeding ticket, and I paid a massive fine. (3) I am talking to my mom on the phone and not paying attention when the speed limit sign changed. (4) I talk to my mom almost every day. (5) Following rules saves people money becaus speeding tickets cost a fortune.

• For example,

• Moreover,

• This proves that

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CCSS.W.7.2C

CCSS.W.7.3C

What editing change, if any, needs to be made in Sentence 3?

(1) Save money. (2) I got a speeding ticket, and I paid a massive fine. (3) I am talking to my mom on the phone and not paying attention when the speed limit sign changed. (4) I talk to my mom almost every day. (5) Following rules saves people money becaus speeding tickets cost a fortune.

• change am to was

• change am to were

• add a comma after phone

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CCSS.W.7.5

What editing change, if any, needs to be made in Sentence 5?

(1) Save money. (2) I got a speeding ticket, and I paid a massive fine. (3) I am talking to my mom on the phone and not paying attention when the speed limit sign changed. (4) I talk to my mom almost every day. (5) Following rules saves people money becaus speeding tickets cost a fortune.

• delete the period after fortune

• change fortune to fortion

• change becaus to because

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CCSS.W.7.4

CCSS.W.7.5

Which sentence is off-topic and needs to be deleted?

(1) Save money. (2) I got a speeding ticket, and I paid a massive fine. (3) I am talking to my mom on the phone and not paying attention when the speed limit sign changed. (4) I talk to my mom almost every day. (5) Following rules saves people money becaus speeding tickets cost a fortune.

• Sentence 3

• Sentence 4

• Sentence 5

Thesis Statement: Listening to others is the best way to show compassion because it shows you care about others and helps you learn about others.

Question: What is a fact (BMHL) that could fit Reason 1?

• For example, in the movie Coco, Miguel listens to Frida Kahlo and suggests ideas for her show.

• For example, in the movie Coco, he helps someone when he has the chance.

• For example, in a movie, a kid listens to people and cares about them.

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CCSS.W.7.1B

CCSS.W.7.9A