Revising and Editing 7th

What is the best way to revise this sentence:  A famous basketball player carried the Chinese flag named Yao Ming.  

• A famous basketball player named Yao Ming carried the Chinese flag.
• The famous basketball player who carried the Chinese flag, he was named Yao Ming.
• A famous basketball player carried the Chinese flag he was named Yao Ming.
• A famous basketball player carried the Chinese flag.  Who was named Yao Ming. 

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

Which sentence could be added after sentence 8 to strengthen the introduction to this paper? 

• He was a great kid.
• He was in school.
• He was a national hero. 
• He was exceptionally cute.  

Where is the BEST place for Nina to insert the following sentence:
Then, despite his own injuries, Hao went back into the ruins. 

• After sentence 9.
• After sentence 10.
• After sentence 12.
• After sentence 14. 

The word because does not appropriately connect the two clauses in sentence 17.  Which word should replace the word because?  

• if
• while
• although
• where

Which sentence in the fourth paragraph (sentences 18-22) should be deleted?  

• Sentence 18
• Sentence 19
• Sentence 20
• Sentence 22

Which transition word or phrase could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 27 to help conclude this paper? 

• Now 
• Later 
• In comparison
• Furthermore

What's the secret identity of Bruce Wayne? 

• Superman
• Batman
• Ironman
• Spiderman

What change, if any, should be made in the following sentence:
They don't usually let humans get very close to them and they travel in places too dense for wildlife photographers to go.  

• Insert a comma after them
• Delete and
• Change places too dense to places to dense
• No change should be made.

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

What change, if any, should be made in the following sentence:
His cinematographers wasn't having much luck getting footage of the big cats.  

• Change wasn't having to weren't having 
• Change much luck to no luck
• Insert a comma after luck
• Make no change

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CCSS.L.1.1E

CCSS.L.2.1D

CCSS.L.3.1D

CCSS.L.3.1E

CCSS.L.4.1B

What change should be made in the following sentence:
One day, while watching some elephants at the campsite, Downer has an idea.  

• Change while watching to he was watching
• Delete the comma after campsite
• Change has to had
• Change idea to ideal

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CCSS.L.1.1E

CCSS.L.2.1D

CCSS.L.3.1D

CCSS.L.3.1E

CCSS.L.4.1B