STAAR Editing/Revising (pt. 1)

Multiple Choice

Science of Dunking:

1) How should sentence 2 be changed?

• Delete the comma after up

• Change comes to come

• Change fawcet to faucet

• Sentence 2 should not be changed.

Multiple Choice

Science of Dunking:

2) What change needs to be made in sentence 3?

• Change without the to without no

• Change contributions to contribution’s

• Insert a comma after scientists

• Change there to their

Multiple Choice

Science of Dunking:

3) What change needs to be made in sentence 16?

• Change investigations to investagations

• Insert a comma after combinations

• Change teams’ to teams

• No change needs to be made.

Multiple Choice

Science of Dunking:

4) What change should be made in sentence 17?

• Add a comma after best

• Change found to founding

• Change is to are

• No change should be made.

Multiple Choice

Science of Dunking:

5) How should sentence 20 be changed?

• Change too long to to long

• Change and to this

• Change them to it

• Sentence 20 should not be changed

Multiple Choice

Science of Dunking:

6) What change, if any, should be made in sentence 21? Fill in the blank with the correct response,

(21) The research also showed that when only the bottom portion of the cookie was dunked, the cookie ___________ four times longer.

• lasts

• will last

• lasted

• will have lasted

Multiple Choice

Science of Dunking:

7) What is the correct way to write sentences 23 and 24?

• Of course, there are people who argue that researching frivolous things like cookie dunking is a waste 

  of time and money.

• Of course, there are people who argue that researching frivolous things like cookie dunking. It is a 

  waste of time and money.

• Of course, there are people they argue that researching frivolous things like cookie dunking is a waste 

  of time and money.

• The sentences are written correctly in the paper.

Multiple Choice

Sergeant Stubby:

1) In sentence 5, Nick has not offered a strong controlling idea, or thesis statement. Which revision of sentence 5 creates the most effective thesis for this paper?

• More interesting, however, is why everything about the scraggly little dog was stubby.

• More interesting, however, is that Stubby was both unusual and popular during World

  War I.

• More interesting, however, is how this little dog earned the rank of U.S. Army sergeant and became a war hero.

• More interesting, however, is how Stubby was able to keep the name for so very long.

Multiple Choice

Sergeant Stubby:

2)  What is the most effective way to combine sentences 11 and 12?

• While training on a Connecticut field, Conroy found a stray dog that won his heart.

• He was training on a Connecticut field because he found a stray dog that won his heart.

• Training on a Connecticut field, a stray dog that he found won Conroy’s heart.

• He was training on a Connecticut field, there, Conroy found a stray dog that won his heart.

Multiple Choice

Sergeant Stubby:

3) What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 17 and replace the word Plus. (17) ________ he became an unofficial member of Conroy’s unit, the 102nd Infantry.  

• And,

• Eventually,

• Also,

• In the beginning,

Multiple Choice

Sergeant Stubby:

4)  Sentence 25 lacks clarity. What is the most effective change to make to improve the clarity of this sentence?

• A Change recognize to know

• B Change the German  language to it

• C Change him to a German spy

• D  Change the man’s  to his

Multiple Choice

Sergeant Stubby:

5)  What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 27?

• During his stay in a Red Cross hospital, he made the rounds, as he cheered up other patients in the 

  Red Cross hospital.

• During his stay in a Red Cross hospital, he made the rounds to cheer up other patients.

• During his stay in a Red Cross hospital, he made the rounds to cheer up other patients in the Red 

  Cross hospital.

• During his stay in a Red Cross hospital, he made the rounds by cheering up other Red Cross hospital 

  patients.

Multiple Choice

Sergeant Stubby:

6) Nick would like to add a sentence to help with the transition between the fifth paragraph (sentences 21–28) and the sixth paragraph (sentences 29–32). Which sentence should Nick add to the beginning of the sixth paragraph, just before sentence 29?

• Although Stubby had been wounded, he was still a friendly, cheerful dog.

• Fortunately, the dog had earned a high rank during the war.

• It wasn’t long before Stubby was on the battlefields of Europe.

• After about 18 months, Sergeant Stubby and Conroy returned to the United States together.

Multiple Choice

Sergeant Stubby

7) Which idea could BEST follow and support sentence 34?

• He was the first dog to ever earn a rank in any branch of the U.S. armed forces.

• He became the mascot for the university’s football team, entertaining the crowd by pushing the ball around the field with his nose.

• During his war service, Stubby was reported to be sensitive to even a small trace of gas.

• Georgetown University, located in Washington, D.C., was founded in 1789 and is a private institution.