Writing a Personal Narrative for Kids - Episode 6: Revising

In this episode on revising personal narratives, the focus is on enhancing writing by adding descriptive words, removing unnecessary elements, and changing words for better impact. The video provides examples of how to add adjectives and adverbs, remove redundant phrases, and choose more interesting words to improve the narrative. The goal is to make the story clearer and more engaging before publishing. The episode concludes with a preview of the next topic, editing.

What did the teacher decide to remove from the narrative and why?

What changes did the teacher make to improve the sentence about looking at the dogs?