Revise & Edit Assessment

1. Texas Bluebonnet-

2. Martin wants to combine the ideas in sentences 3 and 4. Which of the following sentences combines these ideas in a clear and effective way?

• A) Roadsides, hills, and meadows take on a whole new look.

• B) Roadsides and hills take on a whole new look, and meadows do so too.

• C) Roadsides and hills take on a whole new look, also meadows do.

• D) Roadsides and hills take on a whole new look, meadows as well.

1. 2) Texas Bluebonnet-

2. Which sentence should replace sentence 7 to better state the central idea of this paper?

• People all over the state love and appreciate this very special flower.

• Spring is a great time to grow flowers and other plants in Texas.

• Flowers are blooming across the state, and people in Texas like flowers.

• Bluebonnets grow in this state, but they grow in other places too

1. Texas Bluebonnet- 3)

2. The meaning of sentence 21 is unclear. Which word should replace They in this sentence?

• Artists

• Bluebonnets

• We

• Historians

Answer explanation

"They" painted T-shirts, coffee mugs, and candles.

1. Texas Bluebonnet- 4) What is the BEST way to revise sentence 27?

• The bluebonnet usually appears in March or April but lasts through early May.

• The bluebonnet usually appears in March or April and lasts through early May.

• The bluebonnet usually appears in March or April and through early May.

• The bluebonnet usually appears in March or April it lasts through early May.

The Big Change 5) What is the BEST revision to make in sentence 6?

• Noah’s new little pets are what seemed to be mostly eyes and tails on this first day.

• On this first day, Noah’s new little pets seemed to be mostly eyes and tails.

• The new little pets seemed to be mostly eyes and tails for Noah on this first day.

• On this first day, it seemed to be mostly eyes and tails of Noah’s new little pets.

The Big Change 6)

Claire has included a sentence that does not belong in the third paragraph (sentences 8–13). Which sentence should she remove?

• A. Sentence 8

• B. Sentence 9

• C. Sentence 10

• D. Sentence 11

The Big Change 7)

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 21?

• Small bulges puffed out but on each tadpole’s head and on the sides.

• Small bulges of each tadpole’s head puffed out so on the sides.

• Small bulges or the sides they puffed out of each tadpole’s head.

• No change is needed

The Big Change 8)

Claire wants a more effective transition between the sixth paragraph (sentences 26–29) and the last paragraph (sentences 30–33). Select the ONE correct phrase that should replace After that in sentence 30 to improve this transition.

• Because of his situation, Noah’s eyes drifted to the green plants nearby.

• As his friends hopped away, Noah’s eyes drifted to the green plants nearby.

• While he was thinking, Noah’s eyes drifted to the green plants nearby.

• When the day was over, Noah’s eyes drifted to the green plants nearby.

Editing: The Old 300

(9) What change needs to be made in sentence 2?

• Change Man to man

• Change had to has

• Change big to bigger

• Change dream to dreem

Editing: The Old 300

(10)What change needs to be made in sentence 5?

• Change met to meeted

• Change and to or

• Change finaly to finally

• Change grant to grants