Treetop Adventure/Feathers Not Required Revising and Editing

The phrase 'as though' in sentence 6 does not express what Nick is trying to say. Which word could BEST replace 'as though' and help Nick improve the meaning of the sentence?

• although

• so

• until

• while

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 20 and 21?

• Watching from the other platform, my huge grin matched my dad’s.

• My huge grin matched my dad’s, he was watching from the other platform.

• My huge grin matched my dad’s as he watched from the other platform.

• My huge grin matched my dad’s; who was watching from the other platform.

Read sentence 2: 'I could hardly believe that I was supported by only a pulley and a single steal wire.' What is the correct way to write the misspelled word in sentence 2?

• steel

• steal

• still

• stale

What changes should be made in paragraph 4 (sentences 9–11)? Select TWO correct answers.

• Insert a comma after the word platform in sentence 9

• Delete the quotation marks in sentence 9

• Change grew to growed in sentence 10

• Insert a comma after Nick in sentence 11

• Change asked to asking in sentence 11

What is the correct way to write sentence 14?

• I placed one hand on my harness. The other on the wire behind me.

• I placed one hand on my harness and the other on the wire behind me.

• On my harness I placed one hand, and the other on the wire behind me.

• I placed one hand on my harness and I placed the other hand on the wire behind me.

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 12 and 13?

• The Renaissance was the time of Shakespeare and many scientific breakthroughs, as it was a period of great advances in culture.

• The Renaissance was the time of Shakespeare and many scientific breakthroughs; it was a period of great advances in culture.

• The Renaissance, a period of great advances in culture, was the time of Shakespeare and many scientific breakthroughs.

• One of the periods of great advances in culture called the Renaissance was the time of Shakespeare and many scientific breakthroughs.

Jayden needs to add a transition phrase to help his readers move from the fifth paragraph (sentences 14–19) to the sixth paragraph (sentences 20–23). Which transition could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 20?

• Before long

• Before then

• After a while

• After my research

What changes should be made in paragraph 1 (sentences 1–5)? Select TWO correct answers.

• Delete the comma after summer in sentence 1

• Change call to called in sentence 2

• Delete the comma after am in sentence 3

• Change invites to invited in sentence 4

• Insert a comma after uneasy in sentence 5

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 14?

• Delete the comma after fair

• Change try to tried

• Change that to who

• Make no change

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 22?

• Delete the word had

• Insert a comma after promised

• Change was wearing to wore

• Make no change