4th Grade Revising and Editing STAAR Practice

What revision, if any, should be made to sentence 1?

• It was night after night, and he just kept coming back again.

• Night after night, coming back is what he just kept doing.

• It was night after night of coming back, and he just kept coming.

• No change is needed.

Sentence 36 contains repeated information. What is the BEST way to revise this sentence?

• She studies the local humane society website now to look at it every night.

• She studies the local humane society website now to look at it every night.

• She looks at it every night now, the local humane society website.

• She studies the local humane society website and looks at it every night now.

What revision should be made in sentence 3?

• Fewer in this tiny Texas town live than 2,000 people.

• Fewer live than 2,000 in this tiny Texas town.

• Fewer than 2,000 people live in this tiny Texas town.

• Fewer than 2,000 in this tiny Texas town of people live.

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 7 and 8?

• A cowboy and named Robert Ellison was the first to report seeing them.

• A cowboy named Robert Ellison was the first to report seeing them.

• A cowboy was the first to report seeing them and Robert Ellison.

• A cowboy was the first to report seeing them named Robert Ellison.

Words are repeated in sentence 30. In the space provided, rewrite sentence 30 in a clear and effective way.

Sentence 30: Their presence led to more museums and to more galleries and to more festivals.

Kinsley has not used the BEST choice of words in sentence 2. Which phrase should replace a very big in this sentence?

• one large

• an important

• some huge

• this certain

In the box provided, combine the ideas in sentence 17 and 18 to create one clear and effective sentence.

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 13?

• Baxter had a lot to say, so most mornings I just listened and giggled.

• Baxter had a lot to say but most mornings just listened and giggled.

• Baxter most mornings had a lot to say, or I just listened and giggled.

• Baxter had a lot to say and listen to most mornings, so I just had to giggle.

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 19 to avoid repeating an idea?

• He started describing, and I tried to act interested about his new house.

• He started describing his new house, and I tried to act interested.

• He started describing his new house, and I tried to act interested to the telling about it.

• He started describing his new house and acting interesting to tell about it.