Revision

The author forgot to include this sentence in the paragraph: 'The earth is in orbit around the sun.'

Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 1

• After sentence 2

• After sentence 3

• After sentence 4

Which sentence needs to be revised for clarity and effectiveness?

• Sentence 8

• Sentence 9

• Sentence 10

• Sentence 11

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 6 to avoid repeating ideas?

• Polar bears actually have black skin underneath that thick coat of fur.

• Polar bears actually have black skin and thick coats of fur.

• Polar bears actually have thick coats of white fur with black skin underneath.

A polar bears (a)   coat helps them survive in cold habitats.

• unique
• separate
• large

What is the MOST effective way to combine sentences 4 and 5?

• Tigers have incredibly powerful jaws; they also have sharp claws.

• Tigers have incredibly powerful jaws and sharp claws.

• Tigers have incredibly powerful jaws, but sharp claws.

Which sentence could BEST follow and support sentence 10?

• They are losing their habitat.

• They can also stand on their hind legs.

• They weigh up to 660 pounds.

• They need our help.

What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 8?

• In the morning, he wore them to school, the next day, and observed they were heavy.

• He wore them to school the next day and, in the morning, observed they were heavy.

• The next day he wore them to school and observed they were heavy, in the morning

The author wants to use a more descriptive word than happiness in sentence 10. Which word can BEST replace happiness in this sentence?

• feelings

• excitement

• joy

• pride

The meaning of sentence 4 is unclear. Which sentence should replace sentence 4?

• But what exactly is it about pizza that makes it so popular?

• But what exactly is it about it that makes pepperoni so popular?

• But what exactly is pepperoni about it that makes it so popular?

• But what exactly is it about pepperoni that makes it so popular?

Sentence 9 needs to be revised. Rewrite sentence 9 in a clear and effective way