The Long Hike

Selena wants to add a sentence to the first paragraph to help develop the conflict she will explore in her narrative. Which sentence should she add after sentence 3?

• A. It wasn’t fair. 

• B. The sky was bright blue.

• C. A squirrel ran across the path.

• D. My mom was ahead of both of us.

Selena wants to add variety to her narrative by combining sentences. How should she combine sentences 10 and 11 to highlight the differences between Kate and her?

• A. She loved being outdoors; after, I preferred being inside with the air conditioning blowing.

• B. She loved being outdoors, so I preferred being inside with the air conditioning blowing.

• C. She loved being outdoors while I preferred being inside with the air conditioning blowing. 

• D. She loved being outdoors, while I preferred being inside with the air conditioning blowing.

Selena wants to replace loud in sentence 12 with a more precise word. Select the BEST word to describe Kate’s yell.

A ​​ (a)   yell interrupted my thoughts and brought me back to the present.

• joyful
• funny
• smart
• surprised

Selena wants to add a sentence before sentence 19 to make her narrative clearer. Which sentence BEST accomplishes this goal?

• A. I wish I had the strength to go on.

• B. I turned around, and I headed down the trail.

• C. Kate started down the trail before I reached the top.

• D. When I reached the top, I sat down across from Kate.

Selena is concerned that there is a sentence in her narrative that does not develop the main conflict of her narrative. Which sentence should she delete?

• A. (3) She was effortlessly hiking up the steep, winding path.

• B. (5) We were going to spend a week hiking in Colorado and exploring the Continental Divide.

• C. (6) I had read about the Continental Divide in my social studies class.

• D. (25) Suddenly the trail did not seem as difficult.

Selena thinks that her narrative would have a more powerful ending if she ended on a line of dialogue, rather than just sharing her internal thoughts. Revise sentence 27 by using dialogue to explain how Selena is feeling.