Revision STAAR

Which of the choices below are the steps to revision?

• add

• remove

• move

• substitute

The purpose of revision is to

• make your paper more understandable.

• make your paper more organized.

• remove any repetition.

• make your words more concise and details.

Which editing strategy can help improve the clarity of a sentence by removing unnecessary words or phrases?

• Elaboration

• Conciseness

• Verbose

• Expansion

What is the best way to revise a paragraph to ensure all ideas are connected and flow smoothly from one to the next?

• Use transition words and phrases, check for logical progression, ensure each sentence relates to the main idea, and consider the overall structure of the paragraph.

• Randomly reorder sentences

• Include unrelated anecdotes

• Use bold font for key points

What is the MOST effective revision to make in sentence 23?

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, pulling out brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and paper scraps that I hastily glued together.

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, pulling out brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and there were paper scraps that I hastily and quickly glued together.

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, hastily and quickly gluing together what I pulled out, which was brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and paper scraps.

• In a panic I ransacked our recycle bin, pulling out and removing brown cardboard boxes, paper towel tubes, and paper scraps for hastily gluing together.

Read sentence 8. In the late 1700s and early 1800s, buildings on Wall Street and places such as City Hall may have served as smaller theaters, and other locations in downtown New York City also did. Which is the best way to revise this sentence for clarity?

• Buildings on Wall Street may have served as smaller theaters in the late 1700s and early 1800s, and also places such as City Hall and other locations in downtown New York City.

• In the late 1700s and early 1800s, buildings on Wall Street, including City Hall and other locations in downtown New York City, may have served as smaller theaters.

• In the late 1700s and early 1800s, buildings on Wall Street may have served as smaller theaters, and also places such as City Hall and other locations in downtown New York City.

• Buildings on Wall Street and other locations in downtown New York City may have served as smaller theaters in the late 1700s and early 1800s, and also places such as City Hall.

Select the sentence that is revised for conciseness.

• The book was written by the author in a period of two years.

• The author wrote the book in two years.

Which of the following sentences is revised for conciseness?

• The reason Tom is late is because his car broke down.

• Tom is late because his car broke down.

During the revision process, asking for feedback from peers and adults can help you:

• Finish writing faster.

• Identify areas of improvement.

• Increase the word count.

• Choose better fonts.

Choose the option that revises the sentence for conciseness.

• In my personal opinion, I think that the law is unfair.

• I think the law is unfair.