Paragraph Editing Practice

What is the correct way to write sentence 8?

• F She promised her mother that she would succeed consequently, she walked the four-mile distance daily, between her home and school.

• G She promised her mother that she would succeed consequently she walked the four-mile distance daily between her home and school.

• H She promised her mother that she would succeed. Consequently, she walked; the four-mile distance daily between her home and school.

• J She promised her mother that she would succeed. Consequently, she walked the four-mile distance daily between her home and school.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 10?

• Change have run to ran

• Delete the comma after year

• Change was forced to is forced

• Make no change

What change should Gena make in sentence 17?

• Insert a comma after September

• Change whom to who

• Change proficient to proficiant

• Change came to comes

17 What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 25?

• A Insert a comma after performance

• B Change the comma after 1926 to a semicolon

• C Change mechanical to machanical

• D No change should be made.

How does sentence 28 need to be changed?

• F Change Similar to Similarly

• G Change female to females

• H Change started to would start

• J Insert a comma after Club

Being able to hear those voices from the past is a privilage young people should be grateful to have.

What change should be made in sentence 9?

(Use a dictionary to check spelling)

• Insert a comma after past

• Change is to are

• Change privilage to privilege

• Change grateful to gratefull

Evidence also suggests that the way you hold the rest of your body can affect how you feel. Amy Cuddy did a study on how “power poses” affect people. She is a social psychologist at Harvard University. A power pose is a way of holding your body that suggests you’re in control of a situation. What is the most effective way to combine sentences 12 and 13? (Watch out for run-ons and comma splices. Read slowly and check the flow of the sentences.)

• Amy Cuddy did a study on how “power poses” affect people she is a social psychologist at Harvard University.

• Amy Cuddy did a study on how “power poses” affect people, a social psychologist at Harvard University.

• Amy Cuddy, a social psychologist at Harvard University, did a study on how “power poses” affect people.

• Amy Cuddy did a study, at Harvard University and with a social psychologist, on how “power poses” affect people.

What is the correct way to write the following sentence? 'The teacher said that the students should read the book however many of them did not.'

• A) The teacher said that the students should read the book, however, many of them did not.

• B) The teacher said that the students should read the book; however, many of them did not.

• C) The teacher said that the students should read the book however, many of them did not.

• D) The teacher said that the students should read the book. However many of them did not.

Which word best completes the sentence? 'The committee was _______ in their decision to award the prize to the most deserving candidate.'

• A) unanimous

• B) divided

• C) uncertain

• D) hesitant

What change, if any, needs to be made in the following sentence? 'The artist, who was known for his abstract paintings was invited to the gallery opening.'

• A) Insert a comma after paintings

• B) Change was to is

• C) Change known to know

• D) Make no change