Revise Questions

As she walked along the sand, Mary's bucket filled with different varietys of seashells; her heart also reflected on the memories she had collected during her trip to the seashore. Editing: Use the text above to answer the following question. What change should be made in sentence 1?

• Delete the comma after sand

• Change varietys to varieties

• Change the semicolon after seashells to a comma

• Change during to durring

Many people keep small backyard flocks because chickens have been raised by humans for hundreds of years. Revising: Use the text above to answer the following question. What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 1?

• Chickens have been raised by humans for hundreds of years, and many people still keep small backyard flocks.

• Chickens have been raised by humans for hundreds of years, which means many people still keep small backyard flocks.

• For hundreds of years, people have raised chickens, many people still keep small backyard flocks.

• Chickens have been raised by humans for hundreds of years, there are still many people keeping small backyard flocks.

(1) Rather then sitting home and feeling sorry for myself, I decided to heal my wounds by going and visiting Granny. (2) Her advice always makes me feel better. Editing: Use the text above to answer the following question. How should sentence 1 be changed?

• Change then to than

• Change heal to heel

• Change Granny to granny

• Sentence 1 should not be changed.

What change, if any, should be made to the sentence? 
Leah like to play outside and catch butterflies. 

• Change butterflies to butterflys

• Change like to likes

• Add a comma after and

• Make no change

In the context of writing, what does revising involve?

• Changing the topic of your essay.

• Correcting only the spelling mistakes.

• Re-evaluating the organization, content, and flow.

• Printing the final draft.

Revise the following sentence to improve its flow. "John went to the store. He bought milk."

• John went to the store to buy milk.

• John, going to the store, bought milk.

• To the store, John went and bought milk.

• Milk was bought by John, who went to the store.

Revise the following sentence to improve its clarity. "The cat, which was black and white, jumped on the table, which was old and dusty."

• The black and white cat jumped on the old and dusty table.

• The table, which was old and dusty, was jumped on by the cat, which was black and white.

• On the old and dusty table, the cat, which was black and white, jumped.

• The cat, black and white, on the table, old and dusty, jumped.

Which revision improves clarity and conciseness?

• The boy who was very hungry ate the cake.

• The very hungry boy ate the cake.

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Revise the following sentence to make it clearer. "She saw a bird when she was walking her dog in the park."

• Walking her dog in the park, she saw a bird.

• She was walking her dog in the park when she saw a bird.

• In the park, she saw a bird walking her dog.

• She saw a bird and was walking her dog in the park.

What is the best way to revise sentence 10?

• JJ Watt believes if you work hard, you can make your dreams come true.

• JJ Watt believes in hard work and dreams come true.

• JJ Watt believes dreams and hard work.

• The sentence does not need to be revised.