EOC Revising

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 2?

• Change hardly to really

• Delete so

• Insert a comma after plants

• No change should be made in this sentence.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 2?

(2) In this environment it can be hard to stand out, especially if your relatively new.

• Change environment to enviroment

• Delete the comma

• Change your to you’re

• No change should be made in this sentence.

What change should be made in sentence 13?

(13) At my previous school, where I was president of the eighth-grade class I learned a lot about what it means to organize my time effectively.

• Delete where

• Insert a comma after class

• Change a lot to alot

• Change means to had meant

What is the correct way to write sentence 26?

• In closing, I give you this solemn promise. That if you elect me as president of the sophomore class, I’ll give it my all.

• In closing, I give you this solemn promise: if you elect me as president of the sophomore class, I’ll give it my all.

• In closing, to give you this solemn promise: if you elect me as president of the sophomore class, I’ll give it my all.

• Sentence 26 is written correctly in the paper

During the revising stage, what is a key element to focus on?

• Checking for spelling mistakes

• Enhancing the argument with more evidence

• Formatting the document

• Reducing the word count

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 14?

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina and won four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way, which helped her team.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, which helped her team win four NCAA championships and breaking many school records along the way.

• And at the age of 17, she was playing for the University of North Carolina, where she helped her team win four NCAA championships and broke many school records along the way.

- "Re-seeing" paper as whole

- Focus on organization, audience, development, & support

- Looking at stronger thesis statements, transitions, and clarity

• Editing

• Revising

What is the most effective revision to make in the following sentence? Everyone communicates in person differently than communicating over the phone, through texting, or in online posts.

• Everyone communicates in person in one way, they communicate in different ways over the phone, through texting, or in online posts.

• Everyone communicates differently in person than they do when speaking over the phone, sending texts, or writing online posts.

• Everyone communicates in person differently than they do over the phone, to send texts, or posting online.

• Everyone communicates in person, over the phone, through texting, or in online posts differently.

Melody’s opening sentence is unclear or vague. What change should she make in the following sentence to clarify her introductory paragraph?

• Change They to Teachers and leaders at our school

• Change continually to always

• Change telling us to instructing us

• Change community to surrounding neighborhood

Which sentence in the third paragraph (sentences 7–12) is extraneous and should be deleted from the essay?

• Sentence 7

• Sentence 8

• Sentence 9

• Sentence 12