Choppy Sentences

Which among the following is NOT a correct revision of this choppy sentence:

• Jake and Steven, who are business partners since 1988, started the restaurant chain, and are still profiting from this partnership.

• Jake and Steven have been business partners since 1988, so they started the restaurant chain, and are still profiting from this partnership.

• Because Jake and Steven have been business partners since 1988, they started the restaurant chain, which is still profiting from this partnership.

• Jake and Steven have been business partners since 1988. They started the restaurant chain. They are still profiting from this partnership.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

Which among the following is NOT a correct revision of this choppy sentence: The tornado leveled the Johnsons’ home. It also tore the roof off of their barn.

• The tornado leveled the Johnsons’ home, and also tore the roof off of their barn.

• The tornado, also tore the roof off of their barn, leveled the Johnsons’ home.

• Not only did the tornado level the Johnsons’ home, but also also tore the roof off of their barn.

Choppy or stringy?

The gym is open Wednesday. The gym is open Thursday. The gym is not open Friday.

• choppy

• stringy

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CCSS.L.4.1F

What is the best way to combine these sentences?

Jesse Ventura has denied an interest in running for the senate. Ventura is the former governor of Minnesota.

• Jesse Ventura, the former governor of Minnesota; has denied an interest in running

  for the senate

• Jesse Ventura the former governor of Minnesota, has denied an interest in running for the senate

• Jesse Ventura, the former governor of Minnesota, has denied an interest in running for the senate

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

Which sentence is the correct revision of this stringy sentence:

• Last time I saw baby robins in their nest, and there were four babies. An adult bird was feeding them.

• Last time, I saw baby robins in their nest. There were four babies, and an adult bird was feeding them.

• Last time, I saw baby robins in their nest. There were four babies; therefore, an adult bird was feeding them.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

Which among the sentences is the correct revision of this stringy sentence:

• After our walk, Uncle Raymond and I go to my house, and we look up each bird in a guide. Hence, we show my parents pictures of the birds we saw.

• After our walk, Uncle Raymond and I go to my house. We look up each bird in a guide. We show my parents pictures of the birds we saw.

• After our walk, Uncle Raymond and I go to my house. We look up each bird in a guide, and show my parents pictures of the birds we saw.

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CCSS.L.4.1F

My family left our homeland. Then we migrated to New York. We lived there for several months. Then we moved to Canada. My father had another job.

• Stringy Sentence

• Choppy Sentence

• Correct Sentence

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CCSS.L.4.1F

She took dance classes. She had no natural grace or sense of rhythm. She eventually gave up the idea of becoming a dancer.

• Stringy Sentence

• Choppy Sentence

• Correct Sentence

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CCSS.L.4.1F

It was unbearably hot yesterday. The workers worked on the roof all day. Three of them suffered from sunstroke.

• Stringy Sentence

• Choppy Sentence

• Correct Sentence

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CCSS.L.4.1F

I like it. Mama didn't. I bought it anyway. Now she's mad.

• fragments

• choppy sentences

• run-on sentence

• comma splice

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CCSS.L.4.1F