Revise and Edit

How should sentence 3 and 4 be written?

• As this music, spread across Texas, later a subgenre of the blues appeared in Texas.

• As this music spread across Texas, a subgenre of the blues appeared.

• As this music spread; a subgenre of the blues appeared in Texas.

• A subgenre of the blues appeared in Texas as music spread across Texas.

How should sentences 7 and 8 be combined?

• Johnson made it popular, so he inspired other performers.

• Johnson made it popular, because he inspired other performers.

• Johnson, made it popular, when he inspired other performers.

• Johnson made it popular, and he inspired other performers.

What change should be made to sentence 13?

• Insert and before it

• Insert but before it

• Insert or before it

• No change is needed

What change should be made to sentence 14?

• Delete the comma after 1970s

• Insert a comma after music

• Insert a comma after again

• Insert a comma after country

To make changes and corrections to a draft or other piece of writing is called _________.

• planning

• drafting

• revising

• editing

Choose the option that best revises the following sentence for clarity: "He delivered the performance, which was both powerful and moving, with great skill."

• He skillfully delivered a powerful and moving performance.

• The performance, which he delivered, was powerful, moving, and done with great skill.

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DOK Level 2: Skill/Concept

What is the most effective way to revise sentence 2?

• This could honestly go either way. There are so many good things and bad things that electronics can bring about.

• This could honestly go either way, but there are so many good things and bad things.

• There are so many good things; this could honestly go either way and an almost equal number of bad things.

• No change needs to be made.

Which revision improves clarity and conciseness?

• The boy who was very hungry ate the cake.

• The very hungry boy ate the cake.

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DOK Level 2: Skill/Concept

When you have finished your rough draft, what 4 things should you make sure to check?

• It looks good enough so I'm done.

• capitalization, animal crackers, starbursts, and peanuts

• I don't want to.

• capitalization, indentions, punctuation, and spelling.

Many people believe that Nessie, the creature that lives beneath the Loch Ness in Scotland, is a monster. According to past stories. Nessie is related to a type of aquatic dinosaur!
What is the correct way to write sentences 2 and 3?

• According to past stories, Nessie is related to a type of aquatic dinosaur.

• According to past stories, Nessie is related, to a type of aquatic dinosaur. 

• Nessie is related to a type of aquatic dinosaur, according to past stories. 

• Related to a type of aquatic dinosaur, Nessie, according to past stories.