STAAR Scr Editing

#7 Which of the following should replace sentence 4 to effectively state the controlling idea of this paper?

• There are professionals known as Foley artists, and they got their name from Jack Foley, who was the first Foley artist.

• Many of the sound effects that movie audiences hear are made by Foley artists, film industry professionals whose work is done after the filming of a movie is complete.

• The sounds that you and I hear when we go to see a movie were not always made when the movie was being recorded.

• Professionals create the things that are in the background of movies, including galloping horses, pelting rain, and chirping crickets.

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CCSS.RI.6.2

CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

#9 Akina wants to add support for the idea she has presented in sentence 13. Which sentence should replace sentence 13 to help accomplish this goal?

• Foley believed that if viewers, people who were watching the movie, could hear other sounds, the on-screen story, or the movie itself, the movie would feel more genuine and real.

• Foley believed that if viewers could hear other sounds, the on-screen story of the movie would feel more genuine and more real to them.

• Foley believed something and that is if viewers could hear other sounds, the story being told by the movie would feel more genuine.

• Foley believed that is viewers could hear other sounds, such as heels clicking, dresses rustling, or water sloshing, the story of the movie would feel more genuine.

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.3.1D

#10 What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 15?

• Soon Foley was working to make films more realistic as he was improving the background sound with moviemakers.

• Soon Foley was working with moviemakers to make more realistic films by improving the background sounds.

• Soon Foley was working to improve the background sound with moviemakers and to make films more realistic.

• Soon Foley was working to make more realistic films by improving the moviemakers and background sounds.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

#4 Thomas would like to provide a better tranistion between the fifth paragraph (sentences 20-24) and the sixth paragraph (sentences 25-30). Which of the following should replace sentence 25 to achieve this goal?

• One day my brother and I hiked down the cliffs into the basin to explore the stream.

• Then my brother and I hurried to visit the stream to see the flowing water.

• After a while my brother and I decided to go hiking, and we traveled to the stream.

• In the meantime my brother and I thought it would be fun to explore the stream.

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RL.5.3

#5 What is the most effective way to revise sentence 32?

• In late spring the sides of the cliffs echo with the music of tiny tree frogs.

• In late spring the sides of the cliffs echo with the music of tiny tree frogs, and it is music.

• In late spring the sides of the cliffs echo with the musical echoes of tiny tree frogs.

• In late spring the sides of the cliffs echo music, and it is the music of tiny tree frogs.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

#8 What is the most effective way to combine sentences 6 and 7?

• Background noises and sound effects cannot be adequately recorded during filming these, including such things as roaring cars, galloping horses, or the gentle tapping of pencils on desks.

• Background noises and sound effects cannot be adequately recorded during filming when they include such things as roaring cars, galloping horses, or the gentle tapping of pencils on desks.

• Background noises and sound effects, such as roaring cars, galloping horses, or the gentle tapping of pencils on desks, cannot be adequately recorded during filming,

• Background noises and sound effects cannot be adequately recorded because such things as these roaring cars, galloping horses, or the gentle tapping of pencils on desks are included during filming,

#11 What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 19?

• Fortunately

• FInally

• As a result

• In addition

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CCSS.L.1.1G

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.5.1E

#16 What is the correct way to write sentence 11?

• Cat cafes are exactly what the name suggests, being coffee shops that feature real, live cats.

• Cat cafes are exactly what they name suggests: coffee shops that feature real, live cats.

• Cat cafes are exactly what the name suggests, and coffee shops that feature real, live cats.

• Cat cafes are exactly what the name suggests, Coffee shops that feature real, live cats.

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CCSS.L.9-10.2B

#17 What change, if any, should be made in sentence 16?

• change cat section to Cat Section

• Change customers to customer's

• Change friskyness to friskiness

• Sentence 16 should not be changed.

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CCSS.L.2.1B

CCSS.L.3.1B

CCSS.L.K.1C

#22 What change should be made in sentence 33?

• Insert a comma after London

• Change started to start

• Insert quotation marks before says

• Change founder to Founder

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CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A