Writing Revision STAAR Prep

Use "Mama Dog" to answer #1-5.

What is the BEST way to combine sentences 2 and 3?

• The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, this is a shelter for homeless animals.

• The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary and a shelter for homeless animals.

• The officers, who took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, had a shelter for homeless animals.

• The officers took the dog to the Nuneaton Warwickshire Wildlife Sanctuary, a shelter for homeless animals.

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CCSS.L.6.2A

CCSS.L.7.1A

CCSS.L.9-10.1B

Joe did not maintain a consistent point of view in the first paragraph of this paper. What revision should he make in sentence 5 to correct this problem?

• Change she arrived to the dog arrived

• Change you to humans

• Change no one to they

• Change she would become to it would become

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CCSS.RL.1.6

CCSS.RL.5.6

CCSS.RL.6.6

CCSS.RL.7.6

CCSS.RL.8.6

Joe wants to provide a better closing for the second paragraph (sentences 6–10). Which of these could be added after sentence 10 to more effectively close this paragraph?

• People thought Jasmine was a very strange and unique dog.

• The staff was afraid that Jasmine might accidentally harm the puppies.

• She took care of them as if she had given birth to them herself.

• At that moment the workers at the shelter knew that Jasmine was special.

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CCSS.RI.6.2

CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

Joe would like to add a sentence to support the idea he has presented in sentence 14. Which of these could BEST follow and support sentence 14?

• According to the staff, once Jasmine and the fawn met, they were inseparable.

• Clearly, the fawn was just a little baby at 11 weeks old.

• Jasmine preferred to take care of animals that were similar to her

• Bunnies, badgers, guinea pigs, birds, and fawns—Jasmine cared for a strange mix of animals.

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CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 15?

• The animals at the sanctuary were comforted when Jasmine’s loving presence and gentle care comforted them.

• The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine’s loving presence and gentle care.

• The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine, who had her loving presence and her gentle care.

• The animals at the sanctuary were comforted by Jasmine, her loving presence, and her gentle care.

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CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5

Use "Take Time to Disconnect" to answer #6-11.

Sentence 6 is unclear because Kayla has chosen an inappropriate word. What change should Kayla make to improve this sentence?

• Change Certainly to Surely

• Change most to many

• Change agree to think

• Change profits to benefits

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CCSS.RI.6.3

CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

What transition can BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 9?

• Obviously

• For example

• However

• In the end

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CCSS.L.1.1G

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.5.1E

Kayla wants to provide a better closing sentence for the third paragraph (sentences 12–16). Which of these could replace sentence 16 and improve the closing of this paragraph?

• This obsession can lead to sleep deprivation, which isn’t healthy.

• Doesn’t all this texting during sleep time seem ridiculous to you now?

• Sometimes I check my text messages when I’m in the bathroom.

• Lack of adequate sleep is certainly not a very good thing.

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CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

Kayla needs more support for the idea she is presenting in the fourth paragraph (sentences 17–19). Which two sentences could BEST follow sentence 18 and help develop the main idea of this paragraph?

• Professionals sometimes have to respond to a text immediately. They might lose money if they don’t respond right away.

• There you are talking, and the person next to you is texting. You didn’t expect your day to turn out this way.

• It makes you feel as though you aren’t as important as the person who sent the text. That person gets immediate attention while you sit and wait.

• Sometimes I do this, and my mom reminds me that it’s rude. Occasionally I have to remind her.

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CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

Kayla needs to clarify the meaning of sentence 24. What is the most effective way to do this?

• Change that you to that people

• Change that you to that those you truly care about

• Change it to all that stuff

• Change it to the constant interruption of a phone or a computer

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CCSS.RI.6.5

CCSS.RI.7.3

CCSS.RI.7.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.8.5