Sentence Clarity

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The new rules were passed by the committee during the meeting which was today.

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• The new rules were passed by the committee during today's meeting
• The committee, which met today, passed the new rules.
• The commitee passed the new rules in today's meeting.

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The Federalists’ argument in regard to the destabilization of government by popular democracy was based on their belief in the tendency of factions to further their self-interest at the expense of the common good. 

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• The Federalists argued that popular democracy destabilized government, because they believed that factions tended to further their self-interest at the expense of the common good. 
• The Federalists' arguments about destabilized government in popular democracy was based on their belief in the tendency of factions to further their self-interest at the expense of the common good.
• The Federalists argued popular democracy destabilized government based on their belief in the tendency of factions to promote their own self-interest rather than the common good.

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Industrial spying,because of the growing use of computers to store and process corporate information, is increasing rapidly.

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• Industrial spying is increasing rapidly because of the growing use of computers to store and process corporate information.
• Because of the growing use of computers, in order to store and process corporate information, industrial spying is increasing rapidly. 

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Hurricane Irma, due to its strength, was the reason many schools closed.

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• Due to its strength, Hurricane Irma caused many schools closures.
• Due to its strength, Hurricane Irma was the reason many schools closed.
• Hurricane Irma was the reason many schools close due to its strength.

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The implementation of the plan was successful.

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• The success of the plan was implemented.
• The plan was implemented successfully.

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Playing Overwatch for three hours, my paper was not finished.

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• I did not finish my paper since I played Overwatch for three hours.
• Playing Overwatch for three hours, I did not finish my paper. 
• My paper was not finished, as I was playing Overwatch for three hours.

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Mistakes were made by the government in the management of the war.

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• Mistakes were made by the government in war management.
• The government made mistakes in the management of the war.

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The thing which is most imperative is that we sell the required candy bars.

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• It is imperative we sell the required candy bars.
• The thing which is most imperative is selling the required candy bars.
• The imperative thing is that we sell the required candy bars.

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I received and read the email you sent yesterday about the report you’re writing for the project. I agree it needs a thorough, close edit by an expert.

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• I received your email about the project report and agree it needs an expert edit.
• I received and read the email you sent yesterday about the report you're writing for the project and agree it needs an expert edit.
• Email. I received it. Get an expert reader.

When should you use active voice?

• When the reader doesn't need to know who/what does an action
• When a sentence requires a long bundle of information at the end
• When your mom says it's okay
• Whenever you can