Thesis Statement Review

Zoos should be banned because animals need to remain in the wild, zoos cannot provide natural experiences for animals, and animals in zoos get sick and die.

• Yes, this is a good thesis statement.

• Oh, no, not a good one.

"Those running for President should be held to a higher standard of ethical behavior."

What is this thesis statement missing?

• Topic of the essay is not clear.

• We don't know what is the author's standpoint.

• Author did not give any arguments to support his opinion.

"I think we should wear school uniforms because they would help reduce discipline problems, parents would spend less money on clothes, and it would help create school pride."

How would you improve this thesis statement?

• Add more arguments.

• Replace "I think" with "Students".

• No improvement needed.

"Reality television is leading to a generation of people focused only on themselves, as evidenced by the rise of social media, memes, and selfies."

How can this thesis statement be improved?

• No need for improvement, good enough.

• Arguments are not general enough to compose three body paragraphs.

• Author's standpoint is not clear enough.

"New York is the best city in the world because it attracts people from all over the world, great restaurants, and Broadway shows"

What is the first body paragraph of this essay going to be about?

• New York is the best city in the world

• Diversity

• Restaurants

• Broadway shows

"The North and South fought the Civil War for many reasons, some of which were the same and some different. "

Why does this statement need to be improved?

• Topic of the essay is not clear.

• Author did not state his opinion.

• This statement is too general and simply rephrases the prompt. It does not answer how or why their reasons differed.

Reading develops a child's mind by fostering comprehension skills, increasing vocabulary, and exposing them to new worlds they might not otherwise encounter."

What improvement would you suggest for this thesis statement?

• Add more arguments

• Define the topic

• Nothing, this is example of a perfect thesis statement!

"The Internet serves as a means of connecting people all across the globe, fostering new friendships and an exchange of ideas that wouldn't have occurred prior to its inception."

What is the main idea of the third body paragraph?

• Internet connects people across the globe

• Internet fosters friendships

• Internet helps exchange of ideas

"Americans should add exercise to their daily morning routine. Not only working out keeps our bodies at a healthy weight, but also reduces the risk of high blood pressure."

How can you improve this thesis statement?

• Add arguments that are more specific.

• Provide with examples that support main idea.

• Rephrase it so arguments fit in one sentence.

"Retirees should relocate to Florida, where 75% of Americans choose to settle, because you will afford yourself the opportunity to develop a wide array of friendships."

What is this thesis statement missing?

• Author's opinion is not clear.

• Needs more supporting arguments.

• Not missing anything, good enough for me.