Revising and Editing

(1) I was sad to go home from the Christmas party. (2) As we drove up to our house, though, I am excited to see that my dad put up our Christmas lights and wreaths!
What is the best way to REVISE this sentence 2?

• As we drove up to our house, though, I was excited to see that my dad had put up our Christmas lights and wreaths. 
• As we drove up to our house, though, we was excited to see that my dad had put up our Christmas lights and wreaths.
• As we drove up to our house, though, I be excited to see that my dad had put up our Christmas lights and wreaths.
• As we drive up to our house, though, we was excited to see that my dad had put up our Christmas lights and wreaths.

The dessert has hot sand, cactus, and rocks everywhere. 
What change, if any, needs to be made to this sentence?

• delete the comma after cactus
• change everywhere to every  where
• change dessert to desert
• make no change

The teacher was helpfull and showed the student how to work the difficult math problem. 
What change, if any, is needed in the sentence above?

• add a comma before and 
• change helpfull to helpful
• insert a comma after difficult
• no change is needed

The Pledge of Allegiance is an important part of our monday morning assembly.

• ^{Change important to more important}
• Change an to a
• ^{Change monday to Monday}
• The sentence is correct

(1)One day at school I invited my friend over to spend the night. (2) Next, I ask my football coach if I could have the day off. (3) My friend and I will have a wonderful time. What transition word could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 3?

• First

• Suddenly

• Lastly

• Once

Choose the best conjunction to join the sentence pair.
We can ask directions. We can use a map. 

• and
• but
• or
• because

The following sentence pair should be combined to make a better sentence. Which is the best revision? 
The bicycle tire is flat. The bicycle tire is on the bike. 

• The bicycle tire is on the bike and the bicycle tire is flat.
• The flat bicycle tire is on the bike.
• On the bike, the bicycle tire there is flat.
• The tire on the bicycle is flat.

What is the BEST way to combine these sentences?

The chocolate icing is creamy. The vanilla icing is too stiff.

• The chocolate icing is creamy or the vanilla icing is too stiff.

• The chocolate icing is creamy, but the vanilla icing is too stiff.

• The chocolate icing is creamy, the vanilla icing is too stiff.

What is the most effective way to rewrite these sentences?

Bella dropped her ice cream cone. It landed on her new shoes.

• Bella dropped her ice cream cone, and it landed on her new shoes.

• Bella dropped her ice cream cone it landed on her new shoes.

• Bella dropped her ice cream cone, but it landed on her new shoes.

Sentence 5 needs to be revised. In the space provided, rewrite sentence 5 in a clear and effective way.

5) They never to restaurants go with us.