Communicating like Lincoln Revising

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 8 and 9?

• He would retell the stories he had heard to his young friends and because the language and expressions would be simple they could understand.

• He would retell the stories he had heard to his young friends, the language and expressions would be simpler and so they could understand.

• He would retell the stories he had heard to his young friends, simplifying the language and expressions so they could understand.

• He would retell the stories he had heard to his young friends as the language and expressions were simplified by himself so that they could understand.

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 12?

• As well as his knowledge of the writings of prominent figures, Lincoln utilized to help shape his platform for president his developed storytelling skills.

• Lincoln utilized his knowledge of the writings of prominent figures as well as his developed storytelling skills to help shape his platform for president.

• To help shape his platform for president, Lincoln as well as utilized his knowledge of the writings of prominent figures and his developed storytelling skills.

• Lincoln utilized to help shape his platform his knowledge of the writings of prominent figures as well as his developed storytelling skills for president.

Luka has included a redundant idea in the third paragraph (sentences 12–19). Which sentence should be deleted from the paragraph?

• Sentence 13

• Sentence 14

• Sentence 15

• Sentence 16

The word good is not the most effective word to use in sentence 31. Which word should replace good in the sentence?

• charming

• positive

• necessary

• appropriate