Communicating like Lincoln Revising

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 8 and 9?

• He would retell the stories he had heard to his young friends and because the language and expressions would be simple they could understand.

• He would retell the stories he had heard to his young friends, the language and expressions would be simpler and so they could understand.

• He would retell the stories he had heard to his young friends, simplifying the language and expressions so they could understand.

• He would retell the stories he had heard to his young friends as the language and expressions were simplified by himself so that they could understand.

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 12?

• As well as his knowledge of the writings of prominent figures, Lincoln utilized to help shape his platform for president his developed storytelling skills.

• Lincoln utilized his knowledge of the writings of prominent figures as well as his developed storytelling skills to help shape his platform for president.

• To help shape his platform for president, Lincoln as well as utilized his knowledge of the writings of prominent figures and his developed storytelling skills.

• Lincoln utilized to help shape his platform his knowledge of the writings of prominent figures as well as his developed storytelling skills for president.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

Luka has included a redundant idea in the third paragraph (sentences 12–19). Which sentence should be deleted from the paragraph?

• Sentence 13

• Sentence 14

• Sentence 15

• Sentence 16

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CCSS.RI. 9-10.2

CCSS.RI.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.11-12.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

CCSS.RL.9-10.2

The word good is not the most effective word to use in sentence 31. Which word should replace good in the sentence?

• charming

• positive

• necessary

• appropriate

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CCSS.RI.11-12.3

CCSS.RI.11-12.5

CCSS.RI.8.5

CCSS.RI.9-10.3

CCSS.RI.9-10.5