Adversity & Skyscrapers

Which sentences can replace sentences 4 and 5 to create a more effective controlling idea for this paper?

• However, one swimmer, Sarah Thomas, has managed to go above and beyond all the rest. She set a new record by swimming the English Channel four times without stopping.

• But Sarah Thomas is a swimmer who yearned to do more. She has faced some challenging circumstances in her life and felt confident she was ready to tackle the English Channel.

• As a result, Sarah Thomas was able to accomplish something no swimmer had ever accomplished. She swam across the English Channel and set an impressive record.

• Yet Sarah Thomas was able to complete a swim that was an incredible feat. She made it across the English Channel with the help of a small team and was proud of her accomplishment.

Heike wants to add this sentence to the third paragraph of her paper (sentences 10–14). "Finally, on Sunday, September 15, 2019, weather predictions looked favorable, and she set out early that morning." Where is the best place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 10

• After sentence 11

• After sentence 12

• After sentence 13

Sentence 18 contains an indefinite reference that affects the clarity of the sentence. What is the best way to revise sentence 18?

• Change She to They

• Change but to and

• Change they to crew members

• Change her to another teammate

Which sentence in the fifth paragraph (sentences 20–24) contains unnecessary information and should be removed?

• Sentence 20

• Sentence 21

• Sentence 22

• Sentence 23

Heike would like to replace sentence 30 with a more appropriate and relevant quotation. Which of the following can replace sentence 30 to help emphasize a main point of this paper and bring the paper to a more effective conclusion?

• As a Channel Swimming and Piloting Federation committee reported, “It was an outstanding feat of endurance and triumph over adversity. It is, quite simply, the English Channel swim of our age.”

• “If you want to swim across the English Channel from England to France—you have to leave your doubt on the beach in England,” endurance swimmer Lewis Pugh once said.

• “There are so many stories of people swimming in the same spot for hours until the tide turns,” says Colin Hill, a race organizer and member of the International Marathon Swimming Hall of Fame.

• “She started swimming when she was just a little tyke but didn’t know about open-water swimming until after college,” her stepfather Kent Maxson commented.

What is the correct way to write sentence 7?

• The unique event, known as Skyscraper Games by Kids, was the brainchild of Frank Lee.

• Known as Skyscraper Games by Kids. It was a unique event and the brainchild of Frank Lee.

• The unique event, known as Skyscraper Games by Kids. It was the brainchild of Frank Lee.

• Known as Skyscraper Games by Kids, a unique event that was the brainchild of Frank Lee.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 10?

• Change he to it

• Change manipulate to mannipulate

• Change building’s to buildings’

• No change is needed.

What change needs to be made in sentence 12?

• Change the comma after Tetris to a semicolon

• Change involves to will involve

• Change rotating to rotatting

• Change it to them

What change should be made in sentence 13?

• Insert a dash after feet

• Change so big to it was so big

• Change it to they

• Change could be seen to had been seen