Revising an Op-Ed - 12th Grade EpicEd

Which transition word/phrase would best connect the introductory paragraph to the second paragraph?

• Moreover

• Nevertheless

• The reason is that

• As a result

How could the sentence "Physical album sales and downloads provided much more revenue to artists in the past" be revised to improve word choice?

• Physical album sales and downloads gave artists much more money back then.

• In the past, artists earned significantly higher revenues from physical album sales and downloads.

• Physical album sales and downloads were better for artists financially in the old days.

• No revision is necessary.

To improve the organization of the op-ed, where should the counterargument paragraph be moved?

• After the first body paragraph

• After the second body paragraph

• After the third body paragraph

• It should remain in its current position

How could the sentence "Music has become disposable and artists can't rely on loyal fans buying albums" be revised to have a more appropriate tone for the op-ed?

• Music is now treated as a disposable commodity, making it challenging for artists to maintain a loyal fanbase that consistently purchases albums.

• Music is basically trash now, and fans are too lazy to buy albums like they used to.

• Artists are struggling because fans don't appreciate music enough to buy albums anymore.

• No revision is necessary.

Which word would best replace "paltry" in the sentence "That's a paltry sum" to improve word choice?

• tiny

• meager

• pathetic

• unfair

How could the sentence "Streaming payouts need to increase and alternative revenue streams like touring, merchandise, and sponsorships should be developed" be revised to create two sentences with better variety?

• Streaming payouts need to increase. Developing revenue streams like touring, merchandise, and sponsorships.

• Increasing streaming payouts is crucial. Developing alternative revenue streams like touring, merchandise, and sponsorships is key.

• Streaming payouts need to increase, and alternative revenue streams should be developed. These include touring, merchandise, and sponsorships.

• No revision is necessary.

Which transitional phrase would best connect the third and fourth body paragraphs?

• In contrast

• Furthermore

• Despite this

• As a result

How could the sentence "Unless things change, we risk losing a diversity of artists who can't make a sustainable living" be revised to improve word choice and clarity?

• If things don't change, we might lose lots of different artists who can't make enough money.

• Without significant changes, we face the potential loss of artistic diversity as many artists struggle to earn a livable wage.

• Unless things get better, artists won't be able to survive and we'll have less variety in music.

• No revision is necessary.

Which sentence would best conclude the op-ed and reinforce the call to action?

• In conclusion, the music industry is a mess and we need to do something about it.

• By working together to create a more equitable music industry, we can ensure that artists are fairly compensated and that music remains a vibrant and diverse art form for generations to come.

• The music industry has a lot of problems, but if we take action, we can make it better for everyone.

• No additional sentence is necessary.

Which of the following techniques would best improve the overall flow and coherence of the sentences in the op-ed?

• Using a variety of sentence lengths and structures

• Incorporating more complex vocabulary words

• Combining all sentences into one long, continuous sentence

• No improvement is necessary