Revise & Edit TEKS 3.11C/3.11Bii 3rd Grade

Sentence 8 can be rewritten to make the meaning clearer. What is the best way to rewrite sentence 8?

(7) Mother Teresa is born with the name Agnes Bojaxhiu. (8) Her mother taught her to always feed the poor when she was a child. (9) She went to an elementary school run by nuns. (10) Mother Teresa went on a pilgrimage when she was 12.

• Her mother taught her when she was a child to always feed the poor.

• When she was a child, her mother taught her to always feed the poor.

• To always feed the poor, her mother taught her when she was a child.

• When she was a child, to always feed the poor, her mother taught her.

Which of these shows the correct way to write sentence 13?

(12) At 18, she joined the Sister of Loreto in Dublin, Ireland. (13) Later she went with the sisters to India. (14) She worked at a high school for poor girls in India. (15) She taught history and she taught geography too.

• Later, she went with the sisters to India.

• Later she went, with the sisters to India.

• Later she went with, the sisters to India.

• Later she went with the sisters, to India.

Which of these is the best way to write sentence 15 more simply?

(14) She worked at a high school for poor girls in India. (15) She taught history and she taught geography too. (16) She also learned Hindi and Bengali in India. (17) She made final vows to the Sisters of Loreto in 1937.

• 1. She taught history and taught geography. 

• She taught history, taught geography too.

• 1. She taught history, geography too.

• She taught history and geography.

The following sentence needs to be revised. Choose the correct answer showing the sentence written correctly:

They never to restaurants go with us.

• They never with us go to restaurants.

• They never go to restaurants with us.

• They never with us to restaurants go.

• They go with us to restaurants never.

How should the following sentence be revised so that it does not repeat information?

People should be able to relax, and people should be able to enjoy a meal.

• People should be able to relax and enjoy a meal.

• People should be able to relax but enjoy a meal and people.

• People should relax and enjoy to be able for a meal.

• People should be able to relax, so people should enjoy a meal.

The meaning of sentence 28 is unclear. Which phrase should replace them in this sentence?

(27) Are you going out to dinner soon? (28) You should leave them at home. (29) They are safe and content there. (30) Restaurants are for people, not for dogs.

• your furry friends

• those extra items

• the dogs and cats

• a lot of things

What is the BEST way to revise sentence 21?

(19) Mr. Walker was surprised by what happened. (20) When his students had more time to play, they were more focused in the classroom. (21) They had been having trouble, and it was in the past for some of the kids in paying attention. (22) More recess fixed that problem.

• Some of the kids in paying attention in the past had been having trouble.

• In the past some of the kids had been having trouble paying attention.

• They had been having trouble in the past in paying attention for some of the kids.

• Paying attention for some of the kids in the past had been having trouble.

What is the BEST revision to make in sentence 25?

(23) And guess who else took a break during recess? (24) The teachers did! (25) Then everyone came back to the classroom ready to teach and for learning.

• Then to teach and learn, everyone came back to the classroom ready.

• Then everyone came back to the classroom ready for learning, and it was to teach.

• Then everyone came back to the classroom ready to teach and learn.

• Then back to the classroom was everyone who came to teach and for learning.

The word stuff is not the right word for sentence 28. Which word should replace stuff in this sentence?

(27) He now agrees that playtime at school is important. (28) Getting away from stuff is good for students. (29) It helps them pay closer attention when they come back to the classroom. (30) Mr. Walker says that he has learned something from teaching in Finland.

• classwork

• something

• inside

• friendships

Which sentence would BEST follow and support sentence 12?

(10) He decided to teach his students for an hour and a half at a time. (11) Then they could have recess for 30 minutes. (12) By the third day of school, his students were complaining. (13) Then Mr. Walker tried something different. (14) He started teaching in the classroom for 45 minutes.

• Recess was usually held outside in the winter.

• It was still really early in the school year.

• Learning had always been important to Mr. Walker.

• They simply were not used to this new schedule.