Practice: Revising/Editing

1. Amir has written the following sentence in order to clarify the controlling idea of his essay. 

       Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence?

• After sentence 3

• 1. After sentence 4

• After sentence 5

• After sentence 6

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 7 and 8?

• 1. Graffiti is generally numbers, letters, symbols, or street art that uses visual images in much the same way a painting does.

• 1. Graffiti is generally numbers, letters, or symbols; and street art uses visual images in much the same way a painting does.

• 1. Graffiti is generally numbers, letters, or symbols; in fact, street art uses visual images in much the same way a painting does.

• Graffiti is generally numbers, letters, or symbols, while street art uses visual images in much the same way a painting does.

Tags

CCSS.L.2.1F

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.3.1I

CCSS.L.5.1E

CCSS.L.7.1B

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 11?

• 1. The owner might do so in order to beautify the area around the building, to call attention to the building, or to show support for the arts.

• 1. The owner might do so because of beautifying the area around the building, calling attention to the building, or support for the arts.

• 1. The owner might do so because of the beautiful area around the building, or to call attention to the building, or to show support for the arts.

• 1. The owner might do so in order to beautify the area around the building, calling attention to the building, or supporting the arts.

Tags

CCSS.L.3.1A

Amir wants to improve the transition into paragraph 3 (sentences 12–16). What is the most effective transition to add to the beginning of sentence 12?

• 1. For example

• 1. On the other hand

• 1. As a result

• 1. In fact

Tags

CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

Amir does not think that lawless is the best word to use in sentence 13. Which of the following would be a more effective word to use in this sentence?

• Banned

• Criticized

• Dishonest

• Illegal

Tags

CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.3.1G

Amir needs to clarify the meaning of sentence 9. What is the most effective way to do this? 

• the artists

• the work

• the creators

Tags

CCSS.RI.7.4

CCSS.RI.8.4

CCSS.RL.6.4

CCSS.RL.7.4

CCSS.RL.8.4

Amir would like to add the following sentence to the third paragraph (sentences 12-16). 

Where is the BEST place to insert this sentence? 

• 1. After sentence 12

• 1. After sentence 13

• 1. After sentence 14

• 1. After sentence 15

Tags

CCSS.RI.7.2

CCSS.RI.8.2

CCSS.RL.6.2

CCSS.RL.7.2

CCSS.RL.8.2

What change, if any, needs to be made to sentence 3? 

• 1. Insert a comma after graffiti

• 1. Change damage to damege

• 1. Delete the question mark after vandalism

• No change needs to be made in this sentence.

Tags

CCSS.L.4.2C

CCSS.L.6.2A

What change, if any, needs to be made to sentence 5? 

• 1. Change humans to humans’

• 1. Change their to there

• 1. Change the period to an exclamation point

• 1. No change needs to be made in this sentence. 

Tags

CCSS.L.1.1B

CCSS.L.2.2C

CCSS.L.3.2D

What change, if any, needs to be made to sentence 15? 

• Change communicating to comunicating

• 1. Change symbols to symbol’s

• 1. Insert a comma after colors

• 1. No change needs to be made in this sentence. 

Tags

CCSS.L.1.1B

CCSS.L.2.2C

CCSS.L.3.2D