Letter to a School Principal

Which sentence in the second paragraph (sentences 5-12) should be deleted because the detail does not support Ali’s overall message?

• Sentence 7

• Sentence 8

• Sentence 10

• Sentence 12

Ali can improve the clarity of sentence 8 by changing he to—

• My Coach

• You

• Mr. Jones

• My brother

Which transition word or phrase could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 15?

• After careful consideration

• Next

• For example

• However

What change, if any, should be made to sentence 3?

• Change attract to atracts

• Insert a comma after Plus

• Change that to this

• No change needs to be made in sentence 3

What change, if any, should be made to sentence 10?

• Change sam to Sam

• Change he to they

• Remove the apostrophe after brother

• No change needs to be made to sentence 10

What change, if any, should be made to sentence 14?

• Change look to looked

• Change coresponding to corresponding

• Add a comma after further

• No change needs to be made to sentence 14

What change, if any, should be made to sentence 8?

• Insert a comma after friends

• Change his to their

• Change building to built

• No change needs to be made to sentence 8

What is the MOST effective way to revise sentence 2?

• I believe our school will benefit, from a soccer club because we can win and become better.

• I believe that our school will benefit from a soccer club because we can become better players and then win.

• I believe that our school will benefit from a soccer club because so then we can win and then so we can become better players.

• I believe our school will benefit from a soccer club because so, we can win and so, we can become better players.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 6?

• Change it to it’s

• Change boost to bost

• Change our to are

• Change teams to team’s

What change should be made in sentence 13?

• Change you to your

• Change for to four

• Insert a comma after conclusion

• Insert a comma after much