STAAR Editing Practice

(1) I excitedly put the beaters on the highest setting. (2) After a few minutes, I was pleased, I saw fluffy whipped cream. (3) Now all I needed was the cake. (4) When the timer finally dinged, I shot across the kitchen and opened the oven. (5) I expected to see perfection; otherwise I saw a large, flat hockey puck.

What is the best way to rewrite sentence 2?

• After a few minutes, I was pleased to see fluffy whipped cream.

• After a few minutes, I was pleased. To see fluffy whipped cream.

• After a few minutes. I was pleased and saw fluffy whipped cream.

• After a few minutes, I was pleased to see it, it was fluffy whipped cream.

(1) I excitedly put the beaters on the highest setting. (2) After a few minutes, I was pleased, I saw fluffy whipped cream. (3) Now all I needed was the cake. (4) When the timer finally dinged, I shot across the kitchen and opened the oven. (5) I expected to see perfection; otherwise I saw a large, flat hockey puck.

What change should be made in sentence 5?

• Change expected to accepted

• Change otherwise to instead

• Change saw to seen

• Change hockey to Hockey

(6) “Mom!” I screeched loudly. (7) She immediately asked, “did you forget the baking powder?” (8) I wasn’t sure, but I knew that I had promised my dad a special dessert that I wasn’t going to be able to deliver. (9) As usual, Mom came up with a plan to save the day. (10) After looking thoughtfully at my whipped cream, she went to the refrigerator and pulled out a big container of fresh berries.

What change should be made in sentence 7?

• Delete the comma after asked

• Change did to Did

• Change forget to forgot

• Change baking to bakeing

(6) “Mom!” I screeched loudly. (7) She immediately asked, “did you forget the baking powder?” (8) I wasn’t sure, but I knew that I had promised my dad a special dessert that I wasn’t going to be able to deliver. (9) As usual, Mom came up with a plan to save the day. (10) After looking thoughtfully at my whipped cream, she went to the refrigerator and pulled out a big container of fresh berries.

What change should be made in sentence 9?

• Change usual to usually

• Change came to comes

• Insert a comma after plan

• No change is needed.

(1) On the first Monday after Easter, the president and First Lady usually hold a traditional event. (2) It takes place on the lawn of the more famous house in our country. (3) The event began in the 1800s and started out very simply. (4) Children come to the White House to roll eggs down the lawn. (5) Today’s White House Easter Egg Roll has become a much more festive affair. (6) There are numerous egg activities, these include the original egg roll and an egg hunt. (7) There’s also a music stage, where bands perform live. (8) While some attendees decorate cookies others make thank-you cards to send to servicemen and women. (9) Children can even listen to the president and First Lady read stories in a special reading area.

What change should be made in sentence 2?

• Change It to He

• Change takes to took

• Change more famous to most famous

• Change country to Country

(1) On the first Monday after Easter, the president and First Lady usually hold a traditional event. (2) It takes place on the lawn of the more famous house in our country. (3) The event began in the 1800s and started out very simply. (4) Children come to the White House to roll eggs down the lawn. (5) Today’s White House Easter Egg Roll has become a much more festive affair. (6) There are numerous egg activities, these include the original egg roll and an egg hunt. (7) There’s also a music stage, where bands perform live. (8) While some attendees decorate cookies others make thank-you cards to send to servicemen and women. (9) Children can even listen to the president and First Lady read stories in a special reading area.

What change should be made in sentence 4?

• Change come to came

• Change to roll to they rolled

• Insert a comma after eggs

• Change down to from

(1) On the first Monday after Easter, the president and First Lady usually hold a traditional event. (2) It takes place on the lawn of the more famous house in our country. (3) The event began in the 1800s and started out very simply. (4) Children come to the White House to roll eggs down the lawn. (5) Today’s White House Easter Egg Roll has become a much more festive affair. (6) There are numerous egg activities, these include the original egg roll and an egg hunt. (7) There’s also a music stage, where bands perform live. (8) While some attendees decorate cookies others make thank-you cards to send to servicemen and women. (9) Children can even listen to the president and First Lady read stories in a special reading area.

What is the correct way to write sentence 6?

• There are numerous egg activities like the original egg roll there is also an egg hunt.

• There are numerous egg activities, and these include. The original egg roll and an egg hunt.

• There are numerous egg activities, including the original egg roll and an egg hunt.

• There are numerous egg activities. Which include the original egg roll and an egg hunt.

(1) On the first Monday after Easter, the president and First Lady usually hold a traditional event. (2) It takes place on the lawn of the more famous house in our country. (3) The event began in the 1800s and started out very simply. (4) Children come to the White House to roll eggs down the lawn. (5) Today’s White House Easter Egg Roll has become a much more festive affair. (6) There are numerous egg activities, these include the original egg roll and an egg hunt. (7) There’s also a music stage, where bands perform live. (8) While some attendees decorate cookies others make thank-you cards to send to servicemen and women. (9) Children can even listen to the president and First Lady read stories in a special reading area.

What is the correct way to write sentence 8?

• Change decorate to decerate

• Insert a comma after cookies

• Change make to making

• Change send to sent