Revise and Edit QUIZ 1

bekka read someone to love me for her Book Report

• Bekka read Someone to Love Me for her book report.

• Bekka read someone to love me for her book report.

• Bekka read Someone to Love Me for her Book Report.

Jenny invited her friends to a Pool Party for her Birthday

• Jenny invited her friends to a pool party for her Birthday!

• Jenny invited her friends to a Pool Party for her birthday.

• Jenny invited her friends to a pool party for her birthday.

did She name the kitten sunshine because of its golden fur

• Did she name the kitten Sunshine because of its golden fur?

• Did she name the kitten sunshine because of it's golden fur?

• Did she name the kitten Sunshine because of it's Golden fur?

be careful the dog got out of its leash

• Be careful! the dog got out of its leash.

• Be careful! The dog got out of its leash.

• Be careful! The dog got out of it's leash.

Rewrite the following sentence correcting the SIX errors.

on monday, ms smith gave us a science project

janet said wearily, “could you help me up”

• Janet said wearily, “Could you help me up”?

• Janet said wearily, “Could you help me up?”

• Janet said wearily, “could you help me up?”

What change should be made?

“How about going to Tony’s pizzeria tonight?” suggested Mikayla’s dad with a grin.

• Delete the quotation marks

• Change going to having gone

• Change Tony’s pizzeria to Tony’s Pizzeria

• Change with a grin to over a grin

What is the BEST way to revise this sentence?

In martial arts, they become better at self-discipline the longer people train.

• The people that become better at self-discipline, they train in martial arts longer.

• The people that train in martial arts become better at self-discipline longer.

• The longer people train, they become better at self-discipline in martial arts.

• The longer people train in martial arts, the better they become at self-discipline.

What is the MOST effective change to improve the clarity of this sentence?

When my parents, at age seven, insisted I get off the couch and “do something,” I began taking karate.

• I began taking karate at age seven when my parents insisted I get off the couch and “do something.”

• I began taking karate, when my parents at age seven insisted I get off the couch and “do something.”

• My parents insisted I get off the couch and “do something” when I began taking karate at age seven.

• When I began taking karate, my parents insisted I get off the couch and “do something” at age seven.

What is the MOST effective way to combine these two sentences?

Playing a team sport is one way to get this exercise. Not every kid wants to join a team.

• Playing a team sport is one way to get this exercise, so not every kid wants to join a team.

• Playing a team sport is one way to get this exercise, but not every kid wants to join a team.

• Not every kid wants to join a team, also playing a team sport is one way to get this exercise.

• Because playing a team sport is one way to get this exercise, not every kid wants to join a team.