Revising for Clarity

Fundraisers, such as bake sales, could help our school purchase many different things.
What word best replaces "things" to be more concise?

• stuff
• items
• things
• materials

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CCSS.L.5.5C

CCSS.L.5.6

CCSS.RI.5.4

(23) Twenty-five minutes passed by. (24) Where was Susanna? (25) Feeling dread in the pit of her stomach, she was not coming.
How is sentence 25 best revised for clarity?

• Amy knew Susanna, who was feeling dread in the pit of her stomach, was not coming.
• As she was feeling dread in the pit of her stomach, Amy knew Susanna was not coming.
• Feeling dread in the pit of her stomach, Amy knew Susanna was going to miss the interview.
• Amy knew Susanna was going to miss the interview, and because of that, she had a feeling of dread in the pit of her stomach.

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CCSS.L.5.3A

CCSS.W.5.4

CCSS.W.5.5

(3) Once a month, with an interesting adult from the community, the newspaper publishes an interview.
How is sentence 3 best revised for clarity?

• Once a month, the newspaper publishes an interview with an interesting adult from the community.
• From the community once a month, the newspaper publishes an interview with an interesting adult from the community.
• The newspaper publishes an interview, with an interesting adult from the community, once a month.
• An interesting adult from the community, once a month, is interviewed and published by the newspaper.

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CCSS.L.5.3A

CCSS.W.5.4

He lived in Indiana and he also lived in Connecticut before returning back to Maine with his mother when he was eleven.
How is this sentence best revised to remove needlessly repeated information.  

• He went back to Maine with his mother when he was eleven, but before that he lived in Connecticut and he lived in Indiana.
• He returned to Maine when he was eleven; however, he lived in Connecticut and Indiana before he went back to Maine with his mother.
• When he was eleven, he went back to Maine with his mother, but before he returned to Maine, he lived in Connecticut and Indiana
• He lived in Indiana and Connecticut before returning to Maine with his mother when he was eleven.

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CCSS.L.5.3A

CCSS.W.5.4

Rachel was very excited about her new bubble gum machine, but when she put it on the counter, it broke, and her mother had to buy another.

• NO CHANGE

• the bubble gum

• the counter

• the machine

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CCSS.L.5.4A

CCSS.RL.5.1

The police officer received a plaque for his bravery, but he was too modest to display it on his wall.

• NO CHANGE

• them

• this

• the reward

YouTube quickly became popular because it was easy to use, and it was popular by entertaining young people.

What is the BEST way to revise this sentence?

• YouTube quickly became popular because it was easy to use and entertaining to young people.

• YouTube quickly became popular because it was easy to use, it was also entertaining to young people.

• Quickly popular because it was easy to use, YouTube was also entertaining to young people.

• Because YouTube quickly became popular, it was also entertaining to young people.

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CCSS.L.5.3A

CCSS.W.5.4

(1) In the times of the Middle Ages, many children dreamt of becoming a knight. (2) Usually one first became a page when one was eight years old. (3) As a page, a boy would serve his lord because he became a teenager. (4) Then he would become an esquire.

Which sentence could be added after sentence 1 to strengthen the introduction of this paper?

• A knight is very cool.

• Only boys could become knights.

• Only boys could become knights, and it took lots of training.

• Training to be a Knight.

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CCSS.W.5.1A

CCSS.W.5.2A

(1) In the times of the Middle Ages, many children dreamt of becoming a knight. (2) Usually one first became a page when one was eight years old. (3) As a page, a boy would serve his lord because he became a teenager. (4) Then he would become an esquire.

Which word should replace the word "BECAUSE" in sentence 3 to best combine the two?

• until

• if

• while

• although

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CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.5.4A

CCSS.L.5.6

(1) in 1877, The Spalding Company made one of the first baseball mitts. (2) Before it's creation, baseball players played with their bare hands.

Which sentence would be go after sentence 2 as a detail to support the paragraph?

• It was in 1877 when this happened.

• The new mitt was worn by the catcher and had no fingers.

• The first baseball mitts were made by saddle makers.

• Outfields soon began to wear baseball mitts, too.

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CCSS.RI.5.2

CCSS.RI.5.8