MUG 9 - Wordiness & Redundancy - Review

______ voice = the subject is doing something

Which version is best?

• The tree's branches swayed in the wind, and it's leaves rustled endlessly.

• The trees branches swayed in the wind, and its leaves rustled endlessly.

• The tree's branches swayed in the wind, and leaves were rustling endlessly.

• The tree's branches swayed in the wind, and its leaves rustled endlessly.

One of the ways you can reduce a sentence's wordiness and redundancy is to eliminate ___________ words.

Identify the clearest, most concise sentence

• The store offers complimentary gift wrapping at no charge to its customers.

• Thankfully, the store says that they offer complimentary gift wrapping at no charge to its customers.

• The store offers complimentary gift wrapping to its customers.

• The store offers gift wrapping at no charge to its customers.

Identify the voice of the following sentence:

The ball was thrown to me.

• Active

• Passive

_______ voice = something is being done to the subject

Choose the best answer.

• Amanda invited all of the girls Courtney, Allyson, Anna, Jamie, and Nong.

• Amanda invited all of the girls: Courtney, Allyson, Anna, Jamie, and Nong.

• Amanda invited all of the girls, Courtney, Allyson, Anna, Jamie, and Nong.

• Amanda invited all of the girls Courtney, Allyson, Anna, Jamie, and Nong.

Click all of the following that you should trim from a sentence to reduce wordiness and redundancy.

• "It is"

• "There are"

• "That"

• "a, an, and the"

Identify the voice of the following sentence:

The building was renovated in 2021.

• Active

• Passive

Choose the best answer.

• Mrs. McMillen thought she had made it clear, but the students were still confused.

• Mrs. McMillen thought she made it clear, however, the students were confused.

• Mrs. McMillen thought that she had made it clear, and the students were still confused.

• Mrs. McMillen thought she made it clear, the students were confused.