STAAR Revising Stems

Keisha wants to add a sentence to the beginning of her first paragraph (sentences 1-4). Which sentence could she add to clearly state the controlling idea of her paper?

A Many schools have superb athletic programs and winning teams.

B Olympian Steve Prefontaine enjoyed a brief yet inspiring career.

C Steve Prefontaine grew up in a logging town in the Pacific Northwest.

D Steve Prefontaine was named to the Oregon Sports Hall of Fame.

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Which sentence in the third paragraph (sentences 8-12) should be deleted?

A Sentence 9

B Sentence 10

C Sentence 11

D Sentence12

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What is the BEST way to revise sentence 14?

A Athletes ran together, and they tried to avoid each other.

B Athletes ran bunched together dodging one another's elbows, legs, and spikes.

C They tried to avoid each other, but the athletes bumped elbows.

D Although they tried to avoid each other's bodies, the athletes ran too close to each other.

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(You may refer to original pdf) Which sentence could be added after sentence 25 to strengthen the conclusion to this paper?

A The University of Oregon still has a strong track program.

B Long-distance running is a grueling yet rewarding sport.

C Decades after his death, Prefontaine's legacy is alive and strong.

D Prefontaine's success showed that hard work will pay off.

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Which sentence could be added before sentence 8 to improve Corey's transition from the previous paragraph?

A This would be Taylor's first trip to Grandma Bee's ranch, and she was nervous about staying in

the bunk house.

B Taylor had been to her grandma's ranch before, but not since Taylor's parents had moved their family to Texas.

C Taylor was from Colorado, but lives in Texas now with her parents.

D Taylor often played card games such as Crazy Eights and Go Fish with her grandma whenever they visited together.

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The word watched in sentence 13 does not express what Corey was trying to say. Which word or words could BEST replace watched and help Corey improve the meaning of sentence 13?

A observed

B looked at

C viewed

D saw

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What is the BEST way to revise sentences 16 and 17?

A I traveled all across the country while I visited so many beautiful cities.

B Traveling all across the country, visiting so many beautiful cities.

C I visited so many beautiful cities and I traveled all across the country.

D I traveled all across the country and visited so many beautiful cities.

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What is the BEST way to revise sentence 25?

A She had no Idea Grandma Bee knew as much about airplanes and the safety of flying.

B Grandma Bee knew so much about airplanes, and the safety of flying. She had no idea.

C She had no idea Grandma Bee knew so much about airplanes and the safety of flying.

D She had no idea because Grandma Bee knew so much about airplanes and the safety of flying.

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