Argumentative essay revising & editing

#1-3 are from the same essay.

Pro athletes getting paid is taking money away from the team just like how paying college athletes takes money away from colleges.

What makes this claim unclear or incorrect?

• It's correct.

• Colleges pay athletes individually from separate funds.

• Pro athletes are contracted and paid individually.

• College athletes are paid as a team.

#1-3 are from the same essay. Pro athletes getting paid is taking money away from the team just like how paying college athletes takes money away from colleges. College players won't get paid for risking their lives on the court and field, which is why they get scholarships.

What is missing from this introduction?

• quote

• hook

• background information

• thesis

#1-3 are from the same essay. College athletes shouldn't get paid to be on the team because they get scholarships. As it states in paragraph 17 of the Newsela article, "The pay is in playing their sport and..."

What is missing from this cited source?

• the title and/or author

• the website

• the page number

• nothing

#4-6 are from the same essay about why there should be no homework. Firstly, there is a lack of evidence that HW actually helps students. 4th grade students got similar scores to those who did no HW. Homework can cause physical and emotional fatigue.

What needs to be changed in this paragraph?

• The evidence doesn't match the reason/topic sentence.

• The elaboration doesn't match the evidence or the reason/topic sentence.

• The reason doesn't match the evidence and elaboration.

• It's correct.

#4-6 are from the same essay about why there should be no homework. Second, most students are stressed by HW. According to AdCouncil, 90% of middle school students admit to cheating when they were assigned excessive HW.

What type of elaboration should follow this evidence?

• description to paint an image of a cheating student

• cause/effect to explain how HW can cause cheating

• counterclaim to show how this evidence is incorrect

• comparison to show how it's similar to other evidence

#4-6 are from the same essay about why there should be no homework. In conclusion, teachers should cut back on the amount of HW they assign. When students get too much HW, they are stressed. On the other hand, there is much evidence that it helps younger children.

What is wrong with this conclusion?

• The closing statement changes the focus of the essay.

• The counterclaim is incomplete and needs an answer.

• It doesn't restate the thesis.

• It's correct.

#7-9 are from the same essay about why college should be free. To conclude, academy should be costless. Based on these examples, quotes and statistics prove that college should be free. Picture this, you have your dream job, you are making extra money. You don't have to worry about student debt, which is what it would be like if college is free.

In this conclusion, what is the 1st sentence doing?

• making a counterclaim

• adding a closing statement

• summarizing the evidence

• restating the thesis

#7-9 are from the same essay about why college should be free. To conclude, academy should be costless. Based on these examples, quotes and statistics prove that college should be free. Picture this, you have your dream job, you are making extra money. You don't have to worry about student debt, which is what it would be like if college is free.

In this conclusion, what is the 2nd sentence doing?

• making a counterclaim

• adding a closing statement

• summarizing the evidence

• restating the thesis

#7-9 are from the same essay about why college should be free. Picture this, you have your dream job, you are making extra money. You don't have to worry about student debt, which is what it would be like if college is free.

In this conclusion, how could the closing statement be rewritten in 3rd person?

• changing you to everyone and your to his/her

• changing you to I and your to my

• it can't be rewritten

• nothing, it's already in 3rd person

#10-13 are from another essay about why there should be no homework. HW can ruin your family member's life....People say that HW helps parents be engaged but it's the opposite. Researchers have done research to prove HW is bad.

The 2nd sentence started the counterclaim. What could have been given/added to answer it and complete the counterclaim?

• give a statistic for how many parents ARE involved already

• include a quote from a student

• list examples of other ways parents can be involved

• nothing, it's correct