Revising & Editing

How should sentence 4 be changed?

• A Delete the comma after kid

• B Change seeks to sought

• C Change dominate to dominant

• D Sentence 4 should not be changed.

Raquel has not used the most effective word in sentence 9. To improve this sentence, she should change good to —

• F significant

• G working

• H characteristic

• J judicious

What change should be made in sentence 10?

• A Delete the comma

• B Change was to were

• C Change Bulls to bulls

• D Change they're to their

What is the correct way to write sentence 14?

• F In the nineties, he left basketball to play baseball but rejoined the Chicago Bulls in 1995 to help them once again win the next three NBA championships.

• G In the nineties, he left basketball to play baseball, but he rejoined the Chicago Bulls in 1995 to help them win the next three NBA championships once again.

• H In the nineties he left basketball to play baseball; but rejoined the Chicago Bulls in 1995, to help them once again win the next three NBA championships.

• J The sentence is written correctly in the paper.

Raquel wants to improve the transition between the fourth paragraph (sentences 12–16) and the fifth paragraph (sentences 17–23). Which of the following could BEST replace sentence 16 and help accomplish this goal?

• A In 2003, he decided to hang up his sneakers and retire for good.

• B Michael retired from basketball later.

• C He left basketball by retiring from the sport in 2003.

• D Basketball mourned when he left in 2003.

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 18 and 19?

• F He worked for the Nike board of directors, he is promoting his Air Jordan sneakers, and he still does things with Nike.

• G His Air Jordan sneakers are still popular and he was on the Nike board of directors, because he has a strong relationship with Nike.

• H He has worked with Nike on its board of directors; his Air Jordan sneakers are still highly popular.

• J He still has a strong relationship with Nike, including being on its board of directors and promoting his popular Air Jordan sneakers.

How does sentence 23 need to be changed?

• A Change formidable to formidible

• B Change raised to reared

• C Change its to it's

• D No change needs to be made.