Revising Sentences 1

Which sentence is expressed most clearly and effectively?

• The new book was read by every student on the second shelf.

• On the second shelf, the new book was read by every student.

• The new book on the second shelf was read by every student.

Which sentence is expressed most clearly and effectively?

• The cowboy was thrown by the bull with a leather vest.

• The cowboy with the leather vest was thrown by the bull.

• With a leather vest, the cowboy was thrown by a bull.

Which sentence is expressed most clearly and effectively?

• With a flat tire, the turnpike had a car to be towed.

• The car with a flat tire was towed off the turnpike.

• The car was towed off the turnpike with a flat tire.

Which sentence is expressed most clearly and effectively?

• Don't give the fish with small bones in it to the cat.

• Don't give the fish to the cat with its small bones.

• Don't give the fish to the cat with small bones in it.

Which sentence is expressed most clearly and effectively?

• He saw a bird that he didn't recognize sitting on a wire.

• He saw a bird sitting on a wire that he didn't recognize.

Diego Rivera created large, bold murals. His work revived Latin American fresco painting.

• Diego Rivera created Latin American fresco painting.
• Diego Rivera created large, bold murals and revived Latin American fresco painting.
• Diego Rivera created large, bold murals but revived Latin American fresco painting.
• Although he revived Latin American fresco painting, Diego Rivera created murals.

Rivera studied painting in Europe between 1907 and 1921. He became friends with famous artists there.

• Rivera became friends with famous artists while studying painting in Europe between 1907 and 1921.
• Rivera became friends with famous artists between 1907 and 1921.
• Even though Rivera studied painting in Europe, he became friends with famous artists.
• Rivera studied famous artists in Europe between 1907 and 1921.

The bold colors used by some European painters influenced him, but Rivera did not develop his own style of painting until he returned to Mexico from Europe.

• Although the bold colors used by some European painters influenced him, Rivera did not develop his own style of painting until he returned to Mexico from Europe.
• The bold colors used by some European painters influenced him, but Rivera did not develop his own style until he returned to Mexico.
• The bold colors used by some European painters influenced Rivera, but he did not develop his own style of painting until he returned to Mexico.
• Rivera was influenced by European painters and did not develop his own style until he returned to Mexico.

Rivera wanted to create a new art based on national themes. David Alfaro Siqueiros, another Mexican artist, also wanted to create a new art based on national themes.

• Rivera wanted to create a new art based on national themes, as did David Alfaro Siqueiros, another Mexican artist.
• Just like Rivera, David Alfaro Siqueiros wanted to create a new art based on national themes.
• Rivera and David Alfaro Siqueiros, another Mexican artist, both wanted to create a new art based on national themes.
• Rivera wanted to create a new Mexican art.

Rivera believed that art should be available to all people. He began painting murals on public buildings

• Rivera believed that art should be available to all people, but he began painting murals on public buildings.
• Although Rivera believed that art should be available to all people, he began painting murals on public buildings.
• Rivera believed that art should be available to all people, so he began painting murals on public buildings.
• Rivera believed that art should be available to all people, yet he began painting murals on public buildings.