Revise/Edit Prairie

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 5?

• The prairie that is beautiful must be seen and be understood.

• One must see the prairie to understand its beauty.

• One must understand to see the beauty of the prairie.

• The prairie must be understood to see its beauty.

What sentence could be added after sentence 9 to strengthen this paragraph?

• The mountains are very tall in this section of North America.

• Warm air is able to hold a lot of moisture.

• Once the winds and clouds reach the prairie lands, little moisture is left to fall.

• Sometimes the clouds are thick and sometimes they are thin near the mountains.

Alberto is concerned that there is a sentence in the third paragraph (sentences 13-17) that

does not add anything to this paper. Which sentence should Alberto delete from this

paragraph?

• Like a speeding race horse fire often rages across the prairie.

• The tops of any plants in the path of the fire are destroyed, but the roots below ground

  survive.

• Roots hold plants to the ground.

• Matter left behind by the dead parts of the plants help new plants grow from the old

  roots.

What is the best way to combine sentences 16 and 17?

• Matter left behind by the dead parts of the plants helps new plants grow from the old

  roots.

• However, the matter left behind by dead parts of the plants when new plants grow

  from the old roots.

• Matter left behind by the dead parts of the plants, the matter helps new plants grow

  from the old roots.

• As the matter is left behind by dead parts of the plants and new plants grow from the

  old roots.

Alberto would like to add a sentence to support the idea he has presented in sentence 18.

Which of these could BEST follow and support sentence 18?

• The seeds fall, take root, and grow quickly.

• The seeds will grow if they make it to the ground.

• The wind is always blowing on the prairie.

• The wind helps the prairie become a better place for plants.

Which transition word or phrase could BEST be added to the beginning of sentence 27 to help conclude this story?

• Furthermore

• Overall

• In comparison

• Later

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 3?

• Add a comma after Overhead

• Change horizon to horizen

• Change streams to stream’s

• Sentence 3 does not need to be changed.

How should sentence 4 be changed?

• Change south to South

• Change threw to through

• Change middle to middel

• Sentence 4 should not be changed.

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 6?

• Change rocky mountains to Rocky Mountains

• Change prairie to Prairie

• Change west to West

• Change the period after west to a question mark

What change, if any, needs to be made in sentence 6?

• Change The to A

• Insert a comma after rocky

• Insert a comma after mountains and after America

• Delete North