Revising and Editing: House on Mango Street

(5) Schools’ attendance lines are drawn around subdivisions.

(6) So students tend to attend school with other students of similar economic backgrounds.

What is the most effective way to combine sentences 5 and 6?

• Since the schools’ attendance lines are drawn around subdivisions, students tend to attend school with other students of similar economic backgrounds.

• Schools’ attendance lines are drawn around subdivisions, students tend to attend school with other students of similar economic backgrounds.

• Drawing attending lines around subdivisions and student are attending school with those of similar economic backgrounds.

• Schools’ attendance lines are drawn around subdivisions and students tend to attend school with other students of similar economic backgrounds.

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(10) After school, they may g to private lessons or to the mall for shopping. (11) Enter the school parking lot at a different school, and it may be half empty and populated with very old cars, often with extensive dents and peeling paint.

What transition should Josefina add to the beginning of sentence 11?

• However,

• And,

• Consequently,

• In addition,

(12) Students in these schools tend to be dressed in non-name brand clothes, and they probably do not have cell phones, credit cards, or certain items at home. (13) These students often go straight to their jobs after school.

The word certain does not effectively convey Josefina’s meaning in sentence 12. Which of the following would be the best replacement for certain.

• good

• indispensable

• luxury

• other

(15) Urban students have little idea what life is like in rural agricultural areas or in small towns. (16) They probably never have ridden a horse or driven a tractor. (17) Urban teens are used to going anywhere they please without fearing that someone will know them, and tell their parents where they have been or what they have been doing. (18) Rural students often have never been to a large urban center to experience life in an inner city setting. (19) They are always aware that they are surrounded by people who know them and their parents, people who will inform their parents of their whereabouts and activities. (20) They have probably never ridden in a subway car and might never been in a taxi.

Josefina wants to create a topic sentence for the third paragraph (sentences 15 – 20). Which of the following sentences would be the best for her to insert at the beginning of paragraph 3?

• Urban and rural students experience very similar things in their schools.

• Limiting a student’s experiences are the different geographic settings of his or her school.

• Students everywhere have their own experiences in school and in life.

• Geographic settings also often determine a person’s experiences.

(1) Without writers like Sandra Cisneros, whose to know what life is like for people from different backgrounds and of different economic means?

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 1?

• insert a comma after Cisneros

• Change whose to who’s

• Change economic to economical

• No change should be made in sentence 1.

(1) Without writers like Sandra Cisneros, whose to know what life is like for people from different backgrounds and of different economic means? (2) most people tend to live and work surrounded by people like themselves. (3) Thus, one often only learned of different cultures and lifestyles through literature or movies.

What changes should be made in sentence 3?

• Delete the comma after Thus

• Change one to you

• Change learned to learns

• Change through to threw

(7) Enter a student parking lot at some schools, and it will be full of new, expensive cars. (8) Students in these schools might have their own cell phones, credit cards, and personal home computers.

What change, if any, should be made in sentence 8?

• Change cell to sell

• Change their to there

• Change personal to personel

• No change should be made in this sentence.

(13) These students often go straight to their jobs after school. (14) They may work up to forty hours a week to help support theirselves and their families.

What change should be made in sentence 14?

• Change They to He or she

• Change probably to probabally

• Change theirselves to themselves

• Change families to familys

(17) Urban teens are used to going anywhere they please without fearing that someone will know them, and tell their parents where they have been or what they have been doing.

What change should be made in sentence 17?

• Change are to were

• Change are used to had been used

• Delete the comma after them

• Change parents to Parents

(21) Being surrounded by people like themselves, many students may be unaware that there are people in the world who live lives that are very different from theirs’.

What change should be made in sentence 21?

• Delete the comma after themselves

• Change themselves to himself

• Change Being to Had they been

• Change theirs’ to theirs