Revising and Editing -March!

What is the correct way to write sentence 4?

• But the new band director who was determined to change things had a name of Mr. Parker. 
• But the new band director, Mr. Parker, was determined to change things. 
• But the new ban director was determined to change things, named Mr. Parker
• The sentence is written correctly in the paper.

What changes, if any, should be made in sentence 7?

• Insert a comma after school
• Change couldn't to couldn't hardly
• Change investigating to investigatting
• No change should be made in sentence 7.

What change needs to be made in sentence 11?

• Delete the semicolon
• Change took to taken
• Change director's to directors'
• Nothing needs to be changed in sentence 11.

What changes should be made in sentence 12.

• Change respectable to respectible
• Delete the comma after band
• Change was going to were going
• Change them to him

What changes needs to be made in sentence 18?

• Change were even tempted to was even tempted
• Change the comma after quit to a semicolon
• Change ourselves to ourselfs
• Change rising to risen

What change needs to be made in sentence 19?

• Change the coma to a semicolon
• Change almost to allmost
• Change breathe to breath
• No change is needed