Revising/Editing Review

What is the most effective transition word or phrase to add to the beginning of: 
That’s how he got the name Dudley.

• However
• Additionally
• After that
• In fact

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CCSS.L.1.1G

CCSS.L.3.1H

CCSS.L.5.1A

CCSS.L.5.1E

What is the most effective revision to make in:
Searching the Internet, Dudley was found listed for sale.

• Searching the Internet, she found Dudley listed for sale.
• She searched the Internet, she found Dudley listed for sale.
• Searching the Internet was where she found Dudley listed for sale.
• No revision is needed.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

What is the most effective way to revise:
With regular exercise and the diet was strict, Dudley grew trim and sleek, and he was able to make the first cut.

• The exercise was regular and the diet was strict, Dudley grew trim and sleek, and he was
  able to make the first cut.
• With regular exercise and a strict diet, Dudley grew trim and sleek; he was able to make
  the first cut.
• The regular exercise and strict diet that caused Dudley to grow trim and sleek was able to
  make the first cut.
• With regular exercise the diet was strict, so Dudley grew trim and sleek; he was able to
  make the first cut.

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CCSS.L.11-12.3A

CCSS.L.7.1C

Sierra does not think that sane is the best word to use. Which of the following would be a more effective word to use in this sentence:
The biggest challenge for patrol horses is staying sane when faced with distractions and disturbances.

• calm
• friendly
• reasonable
• open

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CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.1.1F

Sierra would like to add a sentence to bring her story to a more effective close. Which
sentence could she add after this sentence: 
He pawed one hoof, bobbed his head, and stood tall, fit, and proud.

• As the son of Zeus and Diamond, Dudley was proud of his heritage.
• The plain little colt had finally become the horse he had been bred to be.
• He was ready to move back to the McGee ranch and be with his family again.
• Dudley would never be the horse that people had hoped for, but he was still special.

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CCSS.L.1.2B

CCSS.L.4.3B

CCSS.L.K.2B

How should this sentence be changed:
There’s science behind the alarm clock that wakes you up, the weather report that influences what you wear, the toothpaste you use to brush your teeth, and even the clean water that comes from your fawcet.

• Delete the comma after up
• Change comes to come
• Change fawcet to faucet 
• This sentence should not be changed

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CCSS.L.1.2C

CCSS.L.5.2A

CCSS.L.7.2A

What changes need to be made?
Clearly, the world you live in today wouldn’t be the same without the contributions of many dedicated scientists and there work.

• Change without the to without no
• Change contributions to contribution's
• Insert a comma after scientists
• Change there to their 

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CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.6.1A

CCSS.L.6.1C

CCSS.L.6.1D

What is the correct way to write:
Len Fisher is a scientist he has made a career out of researching ordinary things in life.

• Len Fisher is a scientist who has made a career out of researching ordinary things in life.
• Len Fisher, a scientist making a career out of researching ordinary things in life.
• Len Fisher is a scientist. Who has made a career out of researching ordinary things in life.
• Sentence 6 is written correctly.

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CCSS.L.6.2A

CCSS.L.7.1A

CCSS.L.9-10.1B

What change needs to be made:
After two different investigations and the testing of approximately 200 cookie-and-drink combinations Fisher announced the teams’ findings.

• Change investigations to investagations
• Insert a comma after combinations
• Change teams’ to teams
• No change needs to be made.

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CCSS.L.6.2A

CCSS.L.4.2C

What change, if any, needs to be made:
The teams were most surprised to learn that hot liquids, such as tea and coffee, didn’t
score good in their tests.

• Insert a comma after surprised
• Delete the comma after coffee
• Change good to well
• Make no change.

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CCSS.L.2.1E

CCSS.L.3.1A

CCSS.L.3.1G