Revising EOC Prep

What is the most effective revision to make in sentence 4? 

• He was a product of Texas high school football program.
• Von Miller gave credit to his high school football coach.
• "I did not learn in California or Florida, but Texas," Miller might have said.  
• Von has one idea, but people might have others, depending on who you ask. 

Which of the following, if any, could replace sentence 6 to create a more effective controlling idea? 

• On the other hand, six-man football uses only six players for a game, so the chances of developing another Von Miller are slim. 
• Significantly, unlike Von Miller's experience, many teams from small towns in Texas play games with only six men, because the players all want to be Von Miller.  
• However, in 138 small towns across Texas, younger NFL hopefuls, dreaming of becoming another Von Miller, play games known as six-man football.
• Sentence 6 is written correctly in the paper. 

Which of these sentences could be added after sentence 7 to add more details and support the main idea in the paragraph? 

• In very small schools, a football player could also be a band member and perform at half time. 
• Schools must have six players to start the game, although the game can go on with only four or five players on a side. 
• Now larger high schools and colleges are using the seven-on-seven practice arrangement, probably based on six man football.  
• Drive by any town in Texas on a Friday night, and the football stadium is filled with players and fans. 

The third paragraph (sentences 10-15) has a redundant sentence. Which sentence should be deleted from this paragraph? 

• Sentence 11
• Sentence 12
• Sentence 13
• Sentence 14

What is the most effective revision to make to sentence 20 to make the sentence appropriate for audience and context? 

• A field goal is worth four points, whereas in regular football it is worth three points; a kicked point after touchdown is worth two points, although it is worth one point in regular games; and finally a run/pass point after touchdown scores one point, whereas in regular football, it scores two points.  
• A field goal is worth four points, and the points after touchdowns are variable in nymber and different from regular football: for kicking, the teams get two points, but for passing or running the teams get one point. 
• A field goal is worth four points and a point after touchdown is worth either two points or one point, depending on if the point after is kicked or run/passed into the end zone. 
• A field goal is worth four points instead of three, a kicked point after touchdown is worth two points instead of one,  and a run/pass point after touchdown scores one point instead of two. 

Barrett has not used an appropriate transition in sentence 22. Which of these could best replace THEREFORE and create a more appropriate transition between sentences 21 and 22. 

• Consequently
• In addition
• However
• No change needs to be made in this sentence.