Revising and Editing

Revising and Editing

Revising

We revise to improve clairty and add in supporting details and information

Multiple Choice

What is the best revision to make in the following sentence?

A shill scream snaps me out of my daydream from the car behind me and returns my focus to the world around me.

• A shill scream snaps me out of my daydream, and from the car behind me, it returns my focus to the world around me.

• A shill scream snaps me out of my daydream and returns my focus to the world around me, it came from the car behind me.

• A shill scream from the car behind me snaps me out of my daydream and returns my focus to the world around me.

• A shill scream snaps me out of my daydream from the car behind me, returning my focus to the world around me.

Multiple Choice

WHAT IS THE BEST REVISION FOR THE FOLLOWING SENTENCE?

When the war was over the soldiers left, and the Comanches returned to the cave for a short period of time.

• When the war was over, the soldiers left, and the Comanches returned to the cave for a short period of time.

• The war was over when, the soldiers left, and the Comanches returned to the cave for a short period of time.

• Although, the war was over when the soldiers left, the Comanches returned to the cave for a short period of time.

• When the war was over; the soldiers left, and the Comanches returned to the cave for a short period of time.

Multiple Choice

How would you best revise this sentence?

I am planning to take art athletics coding and Spanish next year.

• I am planning to take art, athletics, coding, and Spanish next year.

• I am planning to take art and athletics. Coding and Spanish next year.

• I am planing to take Art Athletic Coding and Spanish next year.

• I am planning to take art; athletics; coding; and Spanish next year.

Multiple Choice

How would you revise this sentence?

Ms. Wilson I am happy to say will be back in the classroom soon.

• Ms. Wilson, I am happy to say, will be back in the classroom soon.

• Ms. Wilson I am happy, to say will be back in the classroom soon.

• Ms. Wilson, I am happy to say will be back in the classroom soon?

• Ms. Wilson I am happy to says will be back in the classroom soon.

Multiple Choice

What is the best way to revise this sentence: A famous basketball player carried the Chinese flag named Yao Ming.

• A famous basketball player named Yao Ming carried the Chinese flag.

• The famous basketball player who carried the Chinese flag, he was named Yao Ming.

• A famous basketball player carried the Chinese flag he was named Yao Ming.

• A famous basketball player carried the Chinese flag. Who was named Yao Ming.

Multiple Choice

What is the best way to join these two sentences:
The movie theater was packed full of people excited to see the new Star Wars movie. So I decided to go see Transformers instead.

• Because the movie theater was packed full of people excited to see the new Star Wars movie, therefore I decided to go see Transformers instead.
• The movie theater was packed full of people, excited to see the new Star Wars movie, I decided to go see Transformers instead.
• The movie theater was packed full of people excited to see the new Star Wars movie, so I decided to go see Transformers instead.
• So I decided to go see Transformers instead, because the movie theater was packed full of people excited to see the new Star Wars movie. 

Multiple Choice

. What is the correct way to write these sentences?

• He busied himself turning this way and that, he looked around the small village square.

• Busying himself turning this way and that and he looked around the small village square

• Busying himself turning this way and that. He looked around the small village square.

• He busied himself turning this way and that as he looked around the small village square.

Multiple Choice

. Thomas wants to improve his opening paragraph. Which sentence provides the best imagery?

• The old man swayed back and forth as he rode a donkey along a winding dirt road.

• A donkey traveled along a road with an old man on his back.

• An old man was on the back of a donkey on a dirt road.

• The old man moved on a donkey in order to get to town.

Editing

We edit to fix errors in capitalization, punctuation, spelling, and general grammar.

Multiple Choice

The children at the daycare were excited when their mothers arrived and ran over to greet her.

• Change her to them

• Insert a comma after arrived.

• Change excited to exited

• Make no change

Multiple Choice

Volunteering at the homeless shelters and children's hospitals are one of the most important activities for young adults.

• Change are to is

• Change activities to activity

• Change Volunteering to Voluntering

• Make no change

Multiple Choice

Because she had more relatives and friends, Jenny sold more chocolate then Mark.

• Change then to than

• Delete the comma after friends

• Insert a comma after relatives

• Make no change

Multiple Choice

"Make sure you study for the test," dad reminded me.

• Change dad to Dad

• Delete the comma after test

• Change study to studied

• Make no change

Multiple Choice

Isabelle feels it's not fair that she has to clean the room by herself, it's her sister's room too.

• Change fair to fare

• Change the comma to a semicolon

• Change "too" to "to"

• Make no change

Multiple Choice

I had enjoyed the restaurants in Houston for the last ten years.

• Change had enjoyed to have enjoyed

• Change restaurants to restarants

• Change Houston to houston

• Make no change

Multiple Choice

Students are aloud to listen to music in the morning.

• Change aloud to allowed

• Change students to student

• Insert a comma after music

• Make no change

Multiple Choice

What should you do if the selection is asking your to revise?

• Go straight to the questions and answer them

• Highlight all of the sentences

• Write down all of your grammar rules

• Read the selection before you answer the questions

Multiple Choice

What should you do when you approach the multiple choice questions under the revising and editing selection?

• Highlight keywords and sentences and use your X, ?, check strategy

• Highlight key words only

• Make the best guess

• Use your X, ?, check strategy

Multiple Choice

What change should be made in the sentence?
It didn't seem like such a small amount would be enough to make a pancake but I soon realized just how much the batter spreads out.

• Change didn't to did'nt
• Insert a comma after pancake
• Change spreads out to spread out
• No changes

Multiple Choice

What change should be made to this sentence?
While I scraped my impatience off the griddle, Dad showed me what he meant by "solid bubbles" and then taught me how to flip the pancakes correct.

• Change scraped to scrapped
• Insert a comma after bubbles
• Change taught to teached
• Change correct to correctly

Multiple Choice

____________ time to go home and do your homework.

• It's 
• Its
• neither of these

Multiple Choice

Can I come to the game, _____.

• to
• two
• too

Multiple Choice

Which sentence is written correctly?

• We stopped at the grocery store but we forgot to buy milk.
• we stopped at the grocery store, but we forgot to buy milk.
• We stopped at the grocery store, but we forgot to buy milk.
• We stopped at the grocery store but, we forgot to buy milk.

Multiple Choice

What change should be made?
Clearly, the world you live in today wouldn't be the same without the contributions of many dedicated scientists and they're work.

• Change without the to without no
• Change contributions to contribution's 
• Insert a comma after scientists
• Change they're to their

Multiple Choice

What change should be made?
Clearly, the world you live in today wouldn't be the same without the contributions of many dedicated scientists and they're work.

• Change without the to without no
• Change contributions to contribution's 
• Insert a comma after scientists
• Change they're to their

Multiple Choice

What change needs to be made in sentence 10? 
(10) Instead of telling my Mom, I asked the teacher to move me to the front of the room.

• Change Mom to mom 
• Change the comma to a period 
• Change asked to ask
• No change needs to be made. 

Multiple Choice

What change needs to be made in sentence 9? 
(9) “This, ladies and gentlemen,” Mr. Potter announced as he held up a hat, “Contains all the words on your vocabulary list.”

• Change ladies to lady’s
• Change announced to announsed
• Delete the comma after hat 
• Change Contains to contains 

Multiple Choice

What change, if any, should be made to this sentence?

The current living arrangements is causing me a lot of stress.

• Change arrangements to arangements

• Change is causing to are causing

• Change a lot to alot

• Make no change

Multiple Choice

What change, if any, should be made to this sentence?

The current living arrangements is causing me a lot of stress.

• Change arrangements to arangements

• Change is causing to are causing

• Change a lot to alot

• Make no change